幫我改改英文,送5點(reg.1)

2009-05-05 11:25 pm
請問這是什麼水平?幫我改成篇文+俾少少評價成日錯的地方,辛苦灑。^0*0^
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Background is an important element that effect men and females growth. I think men who are hierarchical, trying hold center position and challenges, they are preserve independence. For instance playing basketball must challenge number one, and they don’t ask for competitive for help. Females is always play in group that talking secrets with friends. They are creating intimacy throughout talking. For example, they are always call friends discuss if make trouble, even small problem. Thus, men and females solve problem is different.


Females search for connection and mal concern with hierarchy. We always heard men said I think…I want…., they are shortening discuss time, and want other agree his points, wish other don’t opposite, they want other people surrender by his, show men is a man. On other hand, I think females likely ask other people opinions, such as what do you think…what are you like. This will solve problem throughout discuss, even address up-level ideas out. Therefore, Men and females use their language is different.


Nowadays, we think females more talkative than men. So that gives more chance female for their job in latest time, especially for manager job. According survey, men earn money was lesser than females, boss likely give chance to females because they are talkative, have patient make the help for customers, eventually improve their profit. However, men don’t. Thus, we are witness the change of females do a profession job; men do housekeep in these years. Comparing men and females, men is taciturn and succinct; females are a way of creating intimacy, so those PR jobs prefer females for example.
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回答時,最好注明學歷作為我既少少紀錄,可填大學,碩士,博士,中7或以下, 以及大學,中專校內排名。^*8*^

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2009-05-06 2:31 am
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You have used a wide range of English vocabulary. However, there
still have quite a lot of mistakes in grammer.


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