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When I first came to the UK two years ago, I determined to learn as much as I could and get an excellent academic result for my parents. After two yesrs of diligence, my achievement is obvious to all now.
My parents have raised me for years and it's time now to pay them back. I am planning to afford most of my tuition by being a part-timer on weekends after I have entered the university. If I could be awared with your scholarship, I will be able to work less so as to concentrate on my study highly. In the previous years, I have achieved a satisfactory academic result and learned diligently. Therefore, I sincerely hope that the committee could award me with the scholarship.

When I came to England two years ago, I was determined to accomplish my academic goals and achieve the best results. After these two years, my goal had been achieved and the accomplishment is evident. My parents had brought me up for many years, now it’s the time to repay them. I planned to pay for my big portion of expenses after promoting to an University. Initially I planned to find a part-time job during the weekend to help relieve the financial burden. However, if I can obtain your scholarship, that can enable me to devote more time in the academic fields and work less time. With my excellent academic results and excellent learning ability, I earnestly ask that you can grant me the scholarship.

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