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Many students are not efficient when they were preparing the tests. Although they want to studying their tests, they are attracted by somethings such as home computer and television. Students are out of control becuase they were enthralled by home computer and television all the day. Nowadays, home computer and television are the main reason to the students studying slowly.

Many students cannot prepare efficiently for tests.Although they want to prepare their tests,they are distracted by things such as home computers and televisions.Students are tempted by them, enthralled all day.Home computers and televisions are the main culprit to delay students' studying.