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Today I am going to talk about〈Harry Potter And The Chamber Of Secrets〉.
This movie TALKS about THAT The Dursleys were so mean and hideous TO Harry Potter, THEREFORE HE wanted to go back to the Hogwarts School for Witchcraft and Wizardry. HOWEVER, just as he was packing his bags, Harry RECEIVED a warning from a strange AND impish creature named Dobby who SAID that if Harry Potter returns to Hogwarts, disaster will strike.

I think Harry Potter is very brave because he FACES disaster WHICH MAY strike him FEARLESSLY. ALSO, he beat Tom Marvolo Riddle AND SAVED Ginny Weasley and those who HAVE BECOME PETRIFIED AS WELL. In the movie I love the Cloak WITH INVISIBILITY and the Howler. [The cloak so (少左個adj) that people can put on stealth and the howler is wizard to convey anger, dissatisfaction with the letter, after the letter openers will be a great volume of the contents of the letter roared out, like the explosion of the same.] = [唔知你想講咩 唔識改]THESE TWO THINGS ARE very magical. I GUESS IT IS IMPOSSIBLE TO HAVE THESE TWO THINGS IN THE REAL WORLD.
When I read the〈Harry Potter And The Chamber Of Secrets, I AM LOOKING forward to the arrival of Harry Potter III.

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Today I am going to talk about〈Harry Potter And The Chamber Of Secrets〉. This movie talks about the Dursleys that were so mean and hideous that summer that all Harry Potter wanted was to get back to (the) Hogwarts School for Witchcraft and Wizardry. But just as he’s packing his bags, Harry receives a warning from a strange, impish creature named Dobby, who says that if Harry Potter returns to Hogwarts, disaster will strike.

I think Harry Potter is very brave because he fearless that disaster will strike him. And he also beat Tom Marvolo Riddle to save Ginny Weasley and those who were petrified . In the movie,
I love the Invisibility Cloak and the Howler. I like the cloak because (that) people can put it on for stealth and the Howler is for the wizard to convey anger and dissatisfaction with the letter, after the letter is opened the contents of the letter will be roared out at a great volume, like an explosion. These are the two things that are very magical. I think it is impossible in the real world .

(And) After I read (the)〈Harry Potter And The Chamber Of Secrets〉, I very much look forward to the arrival of Harry Potter III.