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2009-04-06 8:19 pm
Major income
First, we can earn the income from the advertisements of H&M and IKEA. We will provide a forum of advertisements for H&M and IKEA and receives fees from them. It can let user know more about their company and let the users can click to their web site more easily. It is one of the publicize method to get fees.

We can receive income from some of the company that our application has provided a hyperlink for them or post some information about them in our application. It is a middleman fee that the companies have to pay for us although it is success to make them a profit or not, because it is not commission.

In our application, users have to buy some virtual coins to increase our income. The virtual coins can help them to buy more kinds of furniture or clothes that we have not provided at the beginning. It will be more amusing that the users can change their furniture or clothes more diversify that let them to play our application loyalty.

Our application will just provide a little of games to them at the beginning. When they feel that it is really funny to play, they can pay some fees to apply a full vision of games. The fees will pay one time only and will not change for other charge. Also, it will help the users upgrade all the games automatically in every days or weeks.

There will have sponsorship to support us. When there is a coupon that is successful, they can get some bonus. For example, Disneyland will supply some premiums for those success cases.

Major expenses
We need to pay money to hosing the web to the net every month. So, it is a fixed cost for us.

We have a fixed web implementation cost in every year. In the first year, we have to employ a web design company to help us to design our application’s web site to attract more users. In daily, that company should also service us including all of the technique.

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2009-04-10 10:15 pm
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Major income
First, we can earn our income from H&M’s and IKEA’s advertisements. We will charge them by providing a forum for them, which allows users to know more about their company and can link up with their website. Publicizing is one of our major income.

We can also charge companies when we provide a hyperlink on our applications that leads to their website, where they can also post their information on our application. We will charge them a handling fee and since it is not based on their sales or profit, it will not be regarded as commission.

To further raise our income, we will ask users to buy virtual coins. These virtual coins are used when they need to buy more kinds of furniture or clothing that are not possessed in the beginning. It will be more amusing when the users can change their furniture or clothing in all diversification, which will build up their loyalty through continuous playing.

Our application will provide a trial version in the beginning and when the users feel happy with the game, they will have to pay a one-off payment to apply for a full version game. There will not be any further charges and the application will help them upgrade daily or weekly according to different games.

We are also supported by sponsorships like coupons, users can get bonus. Successful cases are like Disneyland who has provides us with premiums.

Major expenses
We need to pay a fixed monthly charge for hosting the website to network companies.

We also have a fixed yearly web implementation cost. In the beginning, we have to hire a web design company to help us design an attractive web. After that the design company also has to provide monthly technical maintenance and upgrading service for our web.
2009-04-07 5:14 am
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