Letter to host family.

To whom it may concern,

Hello! I am Karen. I was born in Hong Kong, lived in HK for more than xxx years as permanent resident. Moved to Macau recently on my parent's wishes, I'm now studying Form xxxxx in xxxx school. Going to the States has always been my dream, I want to gain international exposure and meet people from different background, so I decided to be an exchange student.

I am sixteen, fairly tiny (only 152cm in height!). I would describe myself as strong character, but easy to get along with and very talkative. I never stop talking in class or at home, of course, only to an extent where I'm not annoying anyone.

My personal experiences are quite different with others as I've lived in Canada, Hong Kong and Macau before. I have a lovely family, my dad, mum and brother. My parents love me very much, they respect my decisions and support me all the time. I have a close relationship with my brother because he is just eleven months older than me. We often fool our parents with some silly jokes and games.

I spend lots of time with my friend, at school and during the weekend. We study and get homework done together. On my bad days when I feel upset about something, my friends will send a message or call me to make sure I'm alright. We shared many happy memories together. I think I am going to miss them. Friends and family are the most important part in my life. With my outgoing personality, I hope I can make many new friends in U.S.A. and have an unforgettable year with your family.

Diving in Phuket was my proudest moment, because I have always been scared of water. I failed in my written diving quiz and nearly died in the training swimming pool. In the end, I faced all the difficulties and became an Open Water Diver. Although I do not know where and which host family I am going to, I will do my best to bring happiness to your family.

It is not too bad at all, you can be more confident in yourself. I will keep modifications to minimum so that your own style and personality are shown.


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Yours: I came from Hong Kong but I live in Macau recently.
＞ I come from Hong Kong and I AM CURRENTLY LIVING IN Macau.


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Yours: I always talk in the class and at home.
＞ I always talk IN CLASS and at home.


Yours: My personal experiences are quite different with others as I lived in Canada, Hong Kong and Macau before.
＞ ... are quite different FROM others as I HAVE lived in Canada...


Yours: My parent love me very much, they...
＞ My PARENTS love me very much....


Yours: I spend lots of time with my friend, at school and in weekend
＞ I spend A LOT OF time with my FRIENDS BOTH at school and in WEEKENDS.


Yours: I think I am going to miss them after I went to America.
＞ ... to miss them WHEN I LEAVE FOR America.


Yours: Friends and family are the most important part in my life.
＞ ... are the most important parts OF my life.


Yours: I hope I can make many new friends in U.S.A.
＞ you might want to us AMERICA, which makes it more consistent with the last sentence, or vice versa.


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Yours: Diving in Phuket was I most proud of myself
＞ Diving in Phuket was MY PROUDEST EXPERIENCE.


Yours: .. I found that I was fear of water after I arrived Phuket.
＞ .... I found that I was AFRAID of water...


Yours: I fail in my written diving quiz and nearly died ..
＞ I FAILED in my written diving quiz....


Yours: Although I do not know where and which host family am I going to..
＞ ... which host family I AM GOING to....


Hope it helps.