我想知我的自我介绍有没有错(贈送10給最佳解答者)

樓上改得很好...
不過會不會改得太好了...?
用字和句子結構所反映的英文程度未免比原文好得太明顯了...
如果是作文 / 口試用的很容易就會知道是有"高人教路"...=.=

My name is ***g, and I am studying in *******l.
駁長d句子代表你識用連接詞~ 可以用返 study~純粹想tenses多元化d~
I love Maths, because I think it is interesting, and I feel successful when I solve a maths question.
通常不用and起句
My hobby is reading, because it can help me learn many new knowledge after reading them and I can use the knowledge in my life.
Because 也是連接句子用的~
我估你想話你學到道理~ 不過很難用簡單英文說的...
所以幫你改成"可在我的生活裏運用這些知識"...
In addition, I love playing badminton and volleyball, because both of them are good for health and help physical development.
有兩樣運動~所以是help~不是helps~
I want to be a fashion designer when I grow up, because I love to design.
love 後面要用 to / +ing~
I come to this school.Because this school provide students a good learning environment and I like this school.
不知道你是想說"我想報這間學校, 是因為..."
還是"我當初選這間學校來唸書, 是因為..."
前者: "I want to / would like to study in your school, because..."
後者: "I like studying in my school, because..."
p.s. "I like this school" 有點太廣泛~
你可以仔細點說明你喜歡這學校的甚麼~
e.g. 老師: I like the teachers in this school.
形象: I like the image of this school.
設施: I like the facilities in this school.
你的英文程度也不錯呢~
有用不少生字和連接詞~
有關你的習慣之類的都有加以解譯~ (而且合理~)
文法上的錯誤也很少呢~~

Hope this helps~~
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2009-03-26 02:34:39 補充：
this school provide students a good learning environment

* this school provides students with a good... / this school gives students a good...

2009-03-26 08:26:36 補充：
一點都不誇呀~
非常平實 + 得體呢~~

My name is xxx. I am living with my family. My favourite subject is Maths because I think it is interesting and everytime after solving a problem I feel very satisfactory.

My hobby is reading, it helps me to think logically and it brings me with new knowledge.

I also like playing badminton and volleyball because both of them are good for health and help in physical development.

When I grow up I want to be fashion designer because I love designing.


I am studying at xxx school and I love this school because this school provides students with a good learning environment.

My name is ***g. I study in *******l. I live in ***with my family. I love Maths because I think it is interesting, and I feel successful when I solve a maths question.
My hobby is reading because it can help me learn many new knowledge after reading them and it can learn some logic.
In addition, I love playing badminton and volleyball because both of them are good for health and can make me storng. I want to be a fashion designer when I grow up because I love design.I come to this school,because this school provide students a good learning environment and I like this school very much!

My name is ***g. I study in *******l. I live in ***with my family. I love Maths, because I think it is interesting. And I feel successful when I solve a maths question.
My hobby is reading . Because it can help me learn many new knowledge after reading them and it can learn some logic.
In addition, I love playing badminton and volleyball, because both of them are good for health and helps physical development. #I want to be a fashion designer when I grow up, because I love *design*.I come to this school.Because this school provide students a good learning environment and I like this school .

*designing/to design things
#=new paragraph

comments:it is good!i can see that you have many hobbies.the reason of why you want to get in this school is also good!try your best in your interview!Good luck!