請幫我睇睇有無錯=] thx

Is not easy to forget you. (這句子無 subject﹐應該加“It”在前面﹕It is not easy to forget you.....)

Even I try and try.. (Even I try and try不是一句完整的句子﹐所以應順連在上文將意思連貫﹕It is not easy to forget you even I try and try)

Maybe ,I am not really want to forget you. (Maybe 之後無須加逗號﹐I AM not really WANT - 的文法錯了﹐want是動詞﹐之前無須加 am﹐所以應改為﹕Maybe I don't really want to forget you.)

We have drunk together,eaten together,walkek together,slept together...(“drunk”是形容詞﹐不能就此跟在“have”之後﹐而後面只需用過去式便可說明曾經一起做過這些事情﹐而不是用過去完成式﹐所以應改為﹕We've got drunk together, ate together, walked together and slept together)

But,we have not be couple..Maybe we are friends only. (“But”之後無須加逗號﹐“have”之後是跟“been”而不是“be”﹐“couple”之前要加 article “a”﹐故應改為﹕But we have not been a couple. Maybe we are friends only.)

呢類疑似情書0既野,要多d利用感情0既張力,所以有d字眼可以絕對d,誇張小小,例如 “nothing”, “all efforts”, “ruins”, “never” “everything”.

你原句d together重覆得太厲害.咁重覆法,唔係叫強調,係叫煩 =.= 唔好意思.簡潔0既字眼,會令你篇野更有力量.
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It is nothing easy to forget you. I tried so hard, but all efforts were in ruins. I never want to take you away from my memories. Look! These were our past days: we drank, ate, walked, slept...everything we did. But, we are not a couple. We are only friends.

It is not easy to forget about you no matter how hard I try. Maybe I do not really want to forget about you. We got drunk together, had eaten together, had walked together, had slept together. Despite of all these, we have not become a couple at all. Maybe we are friends only.

It is not easy to forget you.Even I try and try..Maybe ,I am not really want to forget you.
We have drunk together,eaten together, walked together,slept together...But,we have not be couple..Maybe we are friends only.

We are together as couple, but it is not.