check grammar,please

2)全句改為﹕I agree with Morgan's point of view. He finds out that America's current obesity epidemic is because of our lacking self-control, but the most important thing is they don't know fast food is the major cause of their obesity and is harmful to their bodies.


4)全句改為﹕I would not be a guinea pig to prove the danger of anything. I also don't want to be Morgan's guinea pig as it would be detrimental to my health. Besides, nowadays science and technology are advanced so I don't need to self-experiment it.

5) Yes , I do like documentary . This is a very educational movie
(整句改為: Yes, I do like documentary and this one is particularly educational.)

which may make people think it is boring , but it is extremely hilarious .
(改為﹕Although some people may think it is boring, I think it is extremely hilarious.)

Moreover, the documentary can make
me impression to be profound to let me introspection.
(Grammar 錯﹐改為﹕Moreover, I am deeply impressed by this documentary which leads me to introspect.)

(字數太多﹐請看補充)

2009-02-25 01:30:20 補充：
7)全句改為﹕After watching Super Size Me, I think fast food contains so much fat. Salt and calories can be also harmful to my body.

Moreover, fast food.....
(Grammar 錯﹐ 改為﹕"Furthermore, fast food may have bad influence on us")

(字數又有限﹐再看補充)

2009-02-25 01:30:51 補充：
For example, the fast foods contain......
(Grammar 錯﹐改為﹕ For example, the saturated fat in fast food can cause heart disease, such as heart attack.)

Unless I do not have any .......
(意思錯誤﹕應改為﹕Unless I do not have any other choice, I will not eat fast food.)

很感激你最少自己寫﹐再尋求幫忙﹐好過有些發問者﹐就咁叫人作埋﹗ 千萬要繼續努力﹗加油哦﹗)

002, most of your sentences are grammatically incorrect. Are you actually aware that this is not the very first time you make grammatical mistakes? It seems it is not because of your habit, but your carelessness.

2009-02-26 18:43:59 補充：
...(continued) No offence. If you claim you are a translator, it seems to me that you have to study extremely hard in other to align with your profession.

2009-02-26 18:48:04 補充：
Sorry! Amendment: It seems it is not because of your carelessness, but your habit.

2009-02-26 21:04:36 補充：
Sorry! Amendment 2: ...in order to... -_-

l agree with Morgan's point of view. He finds out of America's current obesity epidemic was our lacking self- control.But the most important is they do not sure the fast food are major cause of their obesity and
nor harmful their body,


4)l would not as a guinea pig to prove the danger of something. l don't want as well as Morgan's as a guinea pig to detrimental to my health. Besides, nowadays the science and technology are great.And also, don't need me as a guinea pig.



5) Yes , I do.I like documentary . This is a very educational movie which will let the people bored.It is very extremely hilarious . Moreover, the documentary can make
me impression to be profound to let me introspection.



7)After watching Super size me I think fast foods contains more fat, salt and calories will harmful my body. Moreover, fast food will make our body bad influence. For example, the fast foods contain a lot of saturated fat can lead to heart disease such as heart attack.Unless I do not have any other choice, I will go to eat fast food .

2009-02-24 21:55:22 補充：
幫你改好左啦

其實你做得唔錯架

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