請幫我改這幾句英文(好簡單的)

=Your 1st sentence:
john always works hard ,so he came back home late everyday and he felt tried when he came back home,
Correct form of writing should be:
John always works hard, so he comes home late every day. He feels tired when he is home.
Mistakes:
1) You should talk about what John does daily with simple present tense.
2) John <------ J
3) every day = adverb of frequently (two words); everyday = adjective (one word)
e.g. This is my everyday (adjective) project.
4) ......, so he comes home late <------ no need to use "back"
5) tired <------ not tried
6) ....... when he is home <------ It is a state, not an action. (講述 'he' 的狀態，並非 'he' 的動作)
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Your 2nd sentence:
he felt happy when he came back home.
Correct ways of writing are:
1. He felt happy when he arrived home. (simple past tense)
2. He feels happy when he is home. (present tense)
Mistake:
1) Don't forget to use a capital letter for the first word of each sentence.
You have written "when he came back home" a few times. I suggest you try to talk about the same thing with different words or expressions.
e.g. when he comes home / when he arrives home / when he is home
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Your 3rd sentence:
john took a show and eat dinner after he came back home
Correct form of writing your sentence is:
John took a shower and had dinner after he came home.
Mistakes:
1) John <------ J
2) shower <------ not show
3) had dinner had <------ past tense Native English speakers would say "to have dinner".
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Your 4th sentence:
after the dinner, john went into bedroom and telephone with friend
Some better ways of writing your sentence are:
1. After dinner, John went into his bedroom and telephoned his friend(s).

2. John went into his bedroom and called/phoned/telephoned his friend(s) after having dinner.





2009-02-18 22:00:06 補充：
-Mistakes:
1) John <------ J
2) telephoned <------ verb in past tense
3) telephoned his XXXXX <------ this phrase is 'verb' + 'object', no need to use any prepositions
4) went into his bedroom <------ use "his" before "bedroom"

2009-02-18 22:00:41 補充：
-telephone = phone = call = 打電話 <------ different verbs about the same action
telephoned/phoned/called <------ verbs in past tense

P.S. If you have further questions, please send me an email.

2009-02-18 22:01:51 補充：
3) every day = an adverb of frequency (two words); everyday = adjective (one word)
e.g. This is my everyday (adjective) project. Correction!!!!!!

1.John always worked hard,so he came back home late everyday and he felt tirend when he came back home.

2.He felt happy when he came home.

3.John tokked a show ane ate dinner after he came back home.

4.After the dinner, John went into bedroom and telephone with a friend

1.spelling
2.full stop
3.past tense

2009-02-18 17:22:03 補充：
我希望有人比我做最佳回答。

2009-02-18 17:26:01 補充：
快d到期 la~

2009-02-18 17:34:48 補充：
你為什麽要出這個問題?是不是想考考我們??

1.john always works hard , so he comes back home late everyday and he always feels tried when he comes home,
2.he feels happy when he comes home
3.john took a shower and ate dinner after he came back home
4.after the dinner, john went into bedroom and phoned with friend