急急急!!!!幫我譯英文! {15點}

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In ancient Rome, the lives of young boys and girls were strictly separate except on one day – the festival of Lupercalia (i.e. early St. Valentine’s Day) – when young boys could pick the girls they admired, and had her names craved onto jars. When that day came, young Romans could dance with the girls whom they had chosen. If the girls were also fond of the boys, they could come together, fall in love and later get married. That day (February 24) is later known as St. Valentine’s Day.

In ancient Rome, the lives of young guys and young ladies were separated strictly. However, when the Lupercalia Festival came, young guys could carve the names of the ladies they loved on the vases. During the Festival, young guys could dance with the ladies they chose to celebrate the Festival. If the chosen ladies loved the guys, they could be matched, fall in love and finally, they would be married in a church. Thereafter, peoples set the fourteenth of February was the Valentines' Day

2009-02-12 19:35:13 補充：
oops, forget to translate the sentence in the bracket
( 以前情人節的稱號 ) --> (the former name of Valentine's Day)

also, the last two words should be "Valentine's Day", not Valentines' Day"!!!

i don't know

I DON'T NO

In the ancient Rome, the young people and young girl's life is separated strictly. However, in the Lu handkerchief Sala festival (before valentine day's title), the young fellows might choose a beloved girl's name to engrave on the vase. Thus, celebrates a holiday, the young fellow may the girl who chooses with dance together, celebration holiday. If is selected the girl also intends to the young fellow, they then may pair, moreover they will fall deeply in love finally and march into the church wedding together. The posterity for this reason and every year's two months on 14th will decide as the valentine day.