please correct the sentences

i have order ds software Dragon quest to you.please wait until 28,march,because it is on sale by this date.put more effort on your study.

I have ordered the DS Dragon Quest software for you.

Please wait until 28,March as it will be on sale by that date.

( It is a bit confusing here. It seems to me that you are talking about something else. )

By the way, do study harder.


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2009-02-07 16:14:37 補充：
Correction:

Please wait until 28 March as it will be on sale by that date.

2009-02-07 16:16:31 補充：
I have ordered the software " DS Dragon Quest" for you.

I have placed an order for the ds software Dragon quest to be delivered to you after 28th March, as it will be on sale by then. In the meantime, please work harder on your studying.