Help to check my poem(20)QUICK

篇poem文法同意思上都有少少問題。

We don't drink beer , <= = ok
we hate deer <= = ok
but we like deer <= = 同上面果句有抵觸, 自相矛盾
we like to cheer <= = ok
we both like to share <= = ok
we never feel fear <= = fear 係 verb / noun, 所以唔可以係e道用
we are friend every year! <= = ok

We don't drink beer,
We hate deer
but we like beer
We like to cheer
We both like to share
We never feel scared
We will be friends every year!

We don't drink beer ,
we hate deer( change it to " beer" perhaps ) hate and like?
Something wrong here!
but we like deer
we like to cheer
we both like to share ( Are you talking about just one friend?)
both = two ( If you are talking about more than one friend, change" both" to " all".)
we never feel fear
we are friends every year!
( " friend" is a countable noun)
we -------------friendS


2009-01-14 00:40:55 補充：
To feel fear <--------------------1000000000000000% correct


To feel fear within (oneself).

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/fear

2009-01-14 00:43:55 補充：
feel + ( noun and adjective) <-----------both correct

To feel fear (noun)
To feel angry ( adjecive)

2009-01-14 00:46:59 補充：
Sorry! both = 2 You and your friend( 1+1) Use " we both"

You and your friendSSSS ( more than two) Use" we all"