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2009-01-04 5:07 am

題目 : what are you opinions about building the Great Wall ? Why couldn't the Great Wall protect China。Why did Chinese Empires continue to build the Great Wall in diggerent dynasties ?

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I think Great Wall is a grand building . Moreover , Great Wall is a terror project . In the antique , emperor spend 12 years to building Great Wall . They nothing advanced machinery to help them . Only have water , earth and plank to building . I think there is intelligent , used this materials are harder than rock . I think Great Wall is a garnd building . But have a lot of people to dead for building Great Wall . they bary in the Great Wall , so , Great Wall because white .

Great Wall can't protect China . Because the nomads want to China culture , silk and anything . But Great Wall impede nomads invade . They detour Great Wall , in obvere to invade . So , china was nomads capture .

I think China Enpire continned to build Great Wall . Because of the Great Wall to protect China , the enemy not easy tp invade China . Than , Great Wall can protect Carvan go to Silk Road buy and sell . Bring different cultures in China .

This is the end of my presentation , thank .

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家俊

2009-01-04 5:56 am

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I think Great Wall is a grand building . Moreover , Great Wall is a terror project . In the antique , emperor spend 12 years to 【building-->bulid】 Great Wall . They 【nothing-->did not】【advanced-->advance】 machinery to help them . Only have water , earth and plank【+brick】 to building . I think there 【is-->was】 intelligent , used 【this-->these】 materials are harder than rock【+s】 . I think Great Wall is a garnd building . But【+there】【have-->had】 a lot of people 【-to】 dead for building Great Wall . They 【+had 】【bary(﹖)bury-->buried】 in the Great Wall , so , Great Wall 【because(﹖)become】 white .

Great Wall can't protect China . Because the nomads want 【-to】【China-->chinese / China's】 culture , silk and anything . But Great Wall impede nomads invade . They detour Great Wall , in obvere to invade . So , China was nomad【-s】 capture .

I think China Empire continued to build Great Wall 【. -->,】【B-->b】ecause of the Great Wall to protect China , the enemy 【+were】not easy to invade China . Then , Great Wall can protect 【Carvan(﹖)】【+who】【go-->went】 to Silk Road 【+which / those】buy and sell . 【+that】Bring different cultures 【in-->for / to】 China .

This is the end of my presentation , thank .

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