i just make up this poem (not really but yea..) about friendship.
Its describing me looking through a camera ..and I see all my friendz and the fun time we have when we hang out ..nd they make me smile ..blah blah blah
I peek through this camera
memories starting to come out of it
Fun time when we hang out together
And they are the most mermorable days ever!
The best of friends can change a frown into a smile when I feel down.
you guyz understand my little trials and lend a hand.
I always share my secret dreams because you guyz care.
you guyz worth more than gold,Give all the love, a heart can hold.
Thanks & I love you guyz
Could you guyz EDIT it plz?
thanks so much :)
is there any grammar or any mistakes?
2009-01-03 3:47 am
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2009-01-03 4:01 am
✔ 最佳答案
You guyz ARE worth more than gold.It really should be guyS with an "s", unless you want to go with urban guyZ.
And should be and.
It should be You (not you) guys are worth more...
give all the love a heart can hold. (small "G" and no comma)
Thanks, and I love you guys. (comma and period.)
It's a beautiful poem. Good luck! :)
2009-01-03 12:10 pm
I peek through this camera, at the memories coming out
Remembrance of fun times,when we would all hang out
Those were the most memorable days of my life.
The best of friends can change a frown, into a smile whenever I'm down
For all my little trials I knew you would understood, for all the times you lent a hand.
My secret dreams I'll always share, because I know you'll always care.
You gave all the love a heart could hold, for that you're worth more than gold.
Thanks, I love you guys.
Remembrance of fun times,when we would all hang out
Those were the most memorable days of my life.
The best of friends can change a frown, into a smile whenever I'm down
For all my little trials I knew you would understood, for all the times you lent a hand.
My secret dreams I'll always share, because I know you'll always care.
You gave all the love a heart could hold, for that you're worth more than gold.
Thanks, I love you guys.
參考: myself
2009-01-03 12:03 pm
I peek through this camera,
memories starting to come out of it.
Fun times are when we hang out together.
And they are the most memorable days ever!
The best of friends can change a frown into a smile when I feel down.
You guys understand my little trials and lend a hand.
I always share my secret dreams because you guys care.
You guys are worth more than gold.
You give all the love a heart can hold.
Thanks & I love you guys.
memories starting to come out of it.
Fun times are when we hang out together.
And they are the most memorable days ever!
The best of friends can change a frown into a smile when I feel down.
You guys understand my little trials and lend a hand.
I always share my secret dreams because you guys care.
You guys are worth more than gold.
You give all the love a heart can hold.
Thanks & I love you guys.
2009-01-03 12:00 pm
I peek through my camera
Memories traveling through the lens
These are great times hen we hang together
They're the most memorable days ever!
A best friend changes a smile into a frown
Every time you feel down
A best friend understands your trials
He lends a hand
I share my secrets and dreams with my friends
Because I know they care
My friends are worth more than gold
We give as much love that a heart can cold
Thanks! I love you guys!
Memories traveling through the lens
These are great times hen we hang together
They're the most memorable days ever!
A best friend changes a smile into a frown
Every time you feel down
A best friend understands your trials
He lends a hand
I share my secrets and dreams with my friends
Because I know they care
My friends are worth more than gold
We give as much love that a heart can cold
Thanks! I love you guys!
2009-01-03 12:05 pm
As I peek through the camera
memories start to appear
Fun times when we hang out together
They are the best days ever!
Great friends can change a frown into a smile when I'm feeling down.
You guyz understand my little trials and always lend a hand.
I always share my secret dreams because you guyz care.
You guyz are worth more than gold,
Give all the love a heart can hold.
Thanks & I love you guyz.
memories start to appear
Fun times when we hang out together
They are the best days ever!
Great friends can change a frown into a smile when I'm feeling down.
You guyz understand my little trials and always lend a hand.
I always share my secret dreams because you guyz care.
You guyz are worth more than gold,
Give all the love a heart can hold.
Thanks & I love you guyz.
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