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Why u r are you interested to be a library assistant ?

I am very interested in this job. The first reason is that the working environment is very silent that I feel so comfortable . The second reason is that I like reading so much that I often borrow books from the library. So it is convenient for me to work in a library. (呢句同上面冇必然關係) And I think the last reason is the salary is acceptable for me. (唔認該暗示畀面試官你care 個人工係幾多) That's all. (呢句似乎多餘) Thank you !

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2008-12-28 14:47:58 補充：
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我覺得你可以咁:
i am interested in this job because of a couple of reasons.
Firstly, the working environment is .........
Secondly, i love reading.........
Lastly, the salary.......
and that's it, thank you for your time.