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因為我英文也不算很差....掛... 哈哈~ 謝謝了 : )
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To me, finance is a subject of knowing and understanding the nature of economy, the flow of money and the high level of analyzing the world situation in terms of monetary. I feel very passionate on the field of finance and I will be delighted if I can gain a career in finance. Finance is a subject which tightly related to the currently financial crisis. The world economy bases on people’s confidence, but it has been reduced so rapidly which accelerate the downturn of the world economy. The crisis is so interesting that motivates me to find the most updated news about it from internet and global news.
My best experience in the stock market should be the financial crisis appeared in December last year. When the share market started to accumulate the irrational rise from July, I earned around 35% by buying three shares including HSBC, Bank of China and China Life. Although I could not manage to avoid the whole downturn of the stock market when the financial appeared, the consequence was that I gained a 17% increase of profit.

I am a technical analysis oriented rather than fundamental. However, Fundamental information is also really important for decision making. Therefore, I am shifting myself from a pure technical analyst to a hybrid of both. However, I find it hard to examine fundamental information. Hence I would like to learn from a high quality university in UK where it has excellent financial experience over the past decades.

My skills, interests, talents and experience have helped prepare towards becoming a financial advisor. I believe I am strong candidate and I am looking forward to the challenges offered by higher education.