Second, my family decided only eating vegetable on the fourth day of the New Year because they want to eat much healthier during the Chinese New Year. My mother raises this tradition. Because my mother used to make a lot of good food to celebrate the Chinese New Year, but most of the food are deep fired and lack of vegetable. Therefore, she decided only making vegetable dishes on the fourth day of the New Year. Because my mother wants to balance our diet during the holiday, she would only make the dishes such as steam vegetable or vegetable soup on the fourth day of the New Year. Because my family has this special tradition, we are eating much healthier at the Lunar Chinese New Year.
Third, going to the Chinese temple on the last day of the Lunar Chinese New Year can give my family good luck. On that day, my mother would bring me to the temple because she believes visiting the god on that day can give us a good luck and protect the family for the whole year. In her religion, she believes that god would give people good luck and help them make their dreams come truth if people visiting on that day. Although I do not believe in the religion, I would go to the temple with my family every the Chinese New Year. Therefore, going to the temple is a very important event in my family because it would bring us the good luck for the entire year.
any gramma mistake in here?
2008-12-19 3:22 pm
回答 (2)
2008-12-19 7:17 pm
✔ 最佳答案
In composition and essay, we shall not use first second third these for opening. Unless you are at powerpoint or summary or highlight etc etc stuff.Since you have given only part of your writing here, I will carry on with necessary amendment...
My family have decided to be vegetarian on the fourth day of every Chinese New Year because we want to stay healthy. This practice was introduced by my mother earlier. She used to make a lot of deep fired foods to celebrate during Chinese New Year, but usually lack of vegetables. Therefore, she suggested only making vegetable dishes on the whole day. The three meals' dishes would be using steam and soup with no oil at all.
We also practice going to the chinese temple on the 15th of the Lunar Chinese New Year. We hope our praying to the god would give the whole family member with good luck the whole year. My mother believes that the god would give good luck and would help making dreams come truth only when people show true respect on that day. Although I do not believe that much, I would go to the temple with my family to show my respect likes everyone else. To my understanding, going to the temple is very important event to my family because we truly believe that would bring us good luck for the entire year.
(In my opinion, your essay is full of repeating, very boring, 1 meaning repeat 3, 4 times. So I cut them out to make it comfortable. Please take care the grammar, tenses. You really need to read more english to brush up all that work. Need more practice.)
參考: my tree of knowledge
2008-12-19 3:36 pm
Yes,there are some mistakes.
收錄日期: 2021-04-12 01:33:58
原文連結 [永久失效]:
https://hk.answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20081219000051KK00167