請協助改英文作文!!(2篇)

My English Teacher


I have many English teachers in my English part. but 2 of them And now, I always remember, one is an English teacher called “Teacher Aaron“. Because he has his own teaching style way. And he is very kindly to every one and alsoand friendly. Even And now he is not teaching me any more, but now I will was always remembered him.


And another one I thankful for teacher is “Teacher Chris”. He is also a kindly man but he had a bad habit that is” smoking”, therefore so every time when he started the his lesson, some one who sat sit near to him will smell the flavor of the cigarette and the smell is a little bit bad.


I met many good English teachers in my elementary school and junior high school. I hope I can meet met more excellent teachers in the future my another part.





My Favorite Animal


My favorite animal is the pig! Everyone always asked me that ” Why you like the pig? ’. My answer is Then I will answer” Because it is same as with my Chinese sign pig according to lunar calendar” But many people think about the pigs are not very clean dirty and very stupid. So almost people don’t like the pigs. But I think pigs are not like the stereotype of the impression that bad.


I have collected many pig's things about pig. And in my birthday my aunt is will always give buy me a gift like the pig product. And I always keep them carefully in my cabinet carefully. Every time when I went out to traveled somewhere, I will always asked please my mother bought buy me some pig's souvenirs for me.


I don’t care mind what people are think about for the pigs. But I like pigs very much. at all!
我為你驕傲, 年紀小小就能架構這麼好的英文, 也沒有多大的錯誤, 只是一些表達還不是很成熟, 沒關係你還小, 有空多閱讀原文英文的書籍, 來提升用英語思考方式表達, 你的英文功力指日可待.
藍色的字請刪掉
橘色是加進去的
改的也不是很好, 提供參考!!
你也可以自行整理過會更好
我把兩位老師合成一段, 整個故事說起來會比較完整, 也刪掉一些 English 才不會讓聽眾老是聽到 English, 還有那個 kindly to every one 的 every one 其實不用因為當然是對每一個人, 不會只對一些人.
那個中國的生肖說法, 老外簡單說 sign=星座, 那樣表答老外就知道了. 當然也有其它說法, 簡單易懂就可以.
基本上你再說過去的事情, 所以動詞大多過去式較多.eg:Every time I went out to travel, 逗點後面也要用過去式.

謝謝所有達人們的答覆,真的很難選,只能對其他給予指導者說抱歉.

My English Teacher


I have many English teachers in my English part. And now, I always remember an English teacher called `` Teacher Aaron“.Fragment (consider revising) . And he is very kind to every one and also friendly. And now he is not teaching me, but now I was always remembered him.


And another thankful teacher is `` Teacher Chris'' . He is a kind man but he had a bad habit that is'' smoking'' , so every time he start his lesson, who sit near to him will smell the flavor of the cigarette and the smell is bad.


I met many good teachers in my elementary and junior school. I hope I can meet more excellent teachers in my another part.

My English Teacher
I have many English teachers in my English course. Until now, I still remember an English teacher who is called "Teacher Aaron" Because he has his own teaching method. And he is very kind to everyone and also friendly. Although now he doesn't teach me, I still always remember him.
And another teacher that I am thankful is "Teacher Chris". He is a kind man but he has a bad habit that is”"smoking", so every time in his lesson, the students who sit near him can smell the flavor of cigarettes and it smells bad.
I met many good teachers in my elementary and junior high school. I hope I can meet more excellent teachers in my other subjects.

My Favorite Animal
My favorite animal is pig! Everyone always asks me"Why do you like pigs"? Then I will answer" Because according to my lunar calendar birthday, it is the same with my Chinese animal sign". But many people think pigs are not very clean and very stupid, so most people don't like pigs. But I think pigs are not as bad as people think, and they are quite different from our impressions.
I have collected many things about pigs. And on my birthday my aunt always buys me a gift. And I always keep it carefully in my cabinet. Every time I go out to travel, I always ask my mother to buy some souvenirs for me.
I don’t mind what people think for pigs. But I like pigs very much!