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Ricky amd Andrew are my two older brothers, Meling is my mother, and King Ping is my father in my family.

My family live in New York for more than 2 years.My family and I lived in Hong Kong for about 12 years.We used to live in an apartment.But now,I live in a house in New York, i feel so happy that I can live with my brothers.

Ricky is 25 years old and he works with the computer every day.When he is not busy(or has time), he likes to play soccer and hit hop with his friends.He was a student in Midwood High School 10 years ago, he always listen to chinese songs.

Andrew is 24 years old and he is my second older brother.He is a student in College now.When he is not busy(or has time),He stays at home play online game with his feiends,but sometime he will go to fishing to his friends too……

Meiling is about 47 years old and she has so much work to do every day .She marries to my dad when she was 18-20 years old.

i don't know much about my father-King Ping because he has so much work to do,but I know he is 52 year old, and he is good at cooking.

My grandmother and grandfather are more than 80 year old, my grandfather is my best friend because we have many things to talk with, but I don't know too much things about them.

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Hello 你好, 我是 Jennie, 有無想過學好D英文呀?? 如果你想學好英文文法, 講和聽都好的話, 就應該去跟一位外籍老師補習, 好像我的老公是位英國人, 我天天跟他講和聽, 就好像講廣東話一樣, 現在我的英文也好了很多呢! 他現正是一位英文補習老師, 如有興趣可聯絡我的 email address, 收費很大眾化..

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希望可以幫到你啦!!
Jennie

基本上整篇文章文法完全唔順
所以我按照你想要的野幫你寫一次


I have a big family - two older brothers, Ricky and Andrew, besides my mother and father.

Ricky is now twenty-five years old and he works with computer./ He likes soccer and hit hop dance with his friends. He was a student in Midwood High School about ten years ago. He likes listening to Chinese songs.


Andrew is my second oldest brother - he's a college student and about 24 years old. He stays home and plays game with his friends when he's free from work. He also goes to fishing with his friends, too.

Meiling is my mother's name. She works very hard everyday. She's forty-seven years old. She married my father when she was about eighteenth, twenty.


My father is name King Ping. I don't know a lot about him because he's always busy with works. All I know is that he's fifty-two years old and he's good at cooking.

My grandmother and grandfather are very old - they are over eighty now. I always think my grandfather is my best friend because we talk and share a lot of things together even though I don't really know much about their past lives.

My family and I moved to New York more than two years already. I spent my first twelve years with my family in Hong Kong since I was born. We used to live in apartment house but now we live in a house. I am very happy to join my brothers and the reunion in New York.


我諗你今年應該係14, 15歲?
我都係nyc住, 有需要可以add msn大家可以幫下手就幫啦
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我12歲個陣黎, 依家17歲

2008-11-05 13:51:17 補充：
My father is name King Ping. 改成
my father's name is King Ping

sorry for that mistake :p

2008-11-05 13:52:40 補充：
sorry, 仲有一處 >.<
I don't really know much about their past lives.

改成
I don't really know much about his life.

最後個句 由their 改成his life

2008-11-05 13:55:36 補充：
請打開呢個網址 (無毒)
我copy左我修改完篇野(包括以上2點修正)
http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dc6fj6jn_169dzj4b9hj
打開之後, 成篇野應該無問題, 我岩岩再改多左幾行野