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Today, I would like to talk about my hobbies.

My first hobby is reading. I really enjoy reading ever since i was nine years old, i usually read 1 book every
week. I like reading stories, like: (you can put some examples here) because i think they are very interesting. I can learn many new vocabularies and increase my knowledge after reading them. Sometimes i would read books with my family, and share my thoughts with them, it was really fun doing that.

My second hobby is watching films, especially comedy ones because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. When there are new films, I will go to the cinema with my family to watch it. But i have many homework to do so i don't always go there. My favourite film is "Get Smart", because it is really funny. (add some information about the movie, like what is it about).

I also like to swim because it makes me healthy. I often go to swimming with my parents every month, but not in the Winter because it is too cold.

This is the end of my presentation, thank you!

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Today I would like to take this opportunity to tell you about my own hobbies.One of my hobbies is reading books.I read a book every week and I like reading fictions especially love stories because they are interesting and romantic, but sometimes they make me shed tears on the pages. By reading books I have learnt much knowledge and new words to expand my vocabulary.I enjoy reading since I was nine years old. Sometimes, my whole family and I will get together to read books quietly at home.
Another hobby of mine is going to the movies.Comedy is my favourite because it makes me happy and relaxing. Whenever there is a new film at the cinema, we surely will go to see it. But if they don't have a new film, we will not go because we have lots of things to do like homeworks and house-hold chores. Of all the films I have seen, my favourite is Get Smart because it is funny and amusing. I like swimming too because it makes me healthy and fit.I go swimming with my parents every month,but not in winter. As you know the weather is too cold in winter for swimming, and unfortunately we cannot afford a warm swimming pool at home.

(too many sentences begins with an "I", so I changed a few, and also made your composition longer and add some adjectives)