生日會...80字...英文!

Yesterday was Betty's birthday.Her family held a birthday party for her at Yummy House.She invited many friend for the party.
Mum bought a birthday cake for Betty.Then they sang birthday song to Betty.Betty wished for her family,friend and the world!They ate the birthday cake happily1
Next,they had a lucky draw.Betty,Tony,Amy and Kelly was the winners.They were glad.The present was a cute brown teddy.
Then,the children give the present to Betty.Betty said'Thank you'to the children.She looked joyful.
Finally,Betty's family gave red packets to everyone.Children back to home happily.Betty had a great birthday.

Is it enough(80 words and degree)

It was Betty's birthday yesterday.Her family held a birther party for her at YuYummy House.She invited many friends togo the party.
Betty'smother bought a brithday cake for him.The brithday cake is beautiful.
She was very happy.Mary give her some perest.~Oh ! It is teddy bear~Mary
said. They sang the brithday songs to her.Then,Alex took the lucky draw.
Then,Betty is took the Hello Kitty.Finally,they call the waiter to take the food give them.It was yummy.
Betty is very happy in yesterday.

. Yesterday, it was Betty's birthday. Her family had a party for her at Yummy House. They had bought a big birthday cake for her. She was very happy and she think that the present was beautiful.
. Then, they went a Japanese restaurant to have their dinner.They called a lot of yummy food. They were all very happy.
. They went back to their home. They played games. They felt sleepy so they all sleep.

可能作得不太好，多多指較。