請幫我改這篇英文!

有些也不能說你錯，只是這樣改會比較通順啦：

I live in Taipei in Taiwan. ---> I live in Taipei, Taiwan.

That a beautiful country! ---> It is a beautiful country.

I love listening to music, drawing comic, dancing and act
---> I love music, comic, dance and act

I hope I can make some new friends from another counry.
---> I hope that I can make some new friends from other countries.

I am a nice girl and we can talk about anything what do you like.
---> I am a nice girl, and we can talk about anything what you like.

So please write to me. I think we can be good friend!
---> Please write to me. We can be good friends!

我們可以交換任何有趣的事物
---> We can swap any interesting things.

我們可以當真心的朋友
---> We can be sincere friends.

我們可以從彼此身上學到有趣的事物
---> We can learn something interesting from each other.

2008-10-18 10:14:08 補充：
My name is Winnie.My nickname is Cherry.
---> My name is Winnie and my nickname is Cherry.

對了，你把小培的姓拼錯了，是「Tisdale」，不是「Tistale」

2008-10-18 10:17:02 補充：
My favorite singer is Ashley Tistale, Jolin,and Ayu Hamasaki.
---> My favorite singers are Ashley Tisdale, Jolin, and Ayu Hamasaki.

hello,TG girls. My name is Winnie.My nickname is Cherry.I live in Taipei, Taiwan, which is a beautiful country!I'm big fan of Ashley Tistale, Jolin, Ayu Hamasaki. I love listening to music, drawing comic, dancing and acting. I hope I can make some new friends from other counry.I am nice and we can talk about anything you like. So please write to me. I think we can be good friends!

我們可以交換任何有趣的事物
We could have personal belongings exchange, if you're interested.
我們可以當真心的朋友
We could be good friends, heart to heart.
我們可以從彼此身上學到有趣的事物
We could learn interesting things each other.

Hello,TG girls! My name is Winnie and my nickname is Cherry.I live in Taipei,which is a city that's located in Taiwan. Taiwan is a beautiful country!My favorite singer is Ashley Tistale, Jolin,and Ayu Hamasaki. I love listening to music, drawing comics, dancing ,and acting. I hope I can make some new friends from another counry.I am a nice girl and we can talk about anything what you like. So please write to me, we will so be good friends!