老師求我把這篇文改為將來式、詞序有問題、加一些介紹和以我身分介紹給一位朋友
但是
我改後不知是否正確
06.00am we will take a bus from our hotel to Stanley for swimming, shopping and eating English food. Next, we will take the bus back to the hotel and will have a break. There is fills the Western leisure low density tourist area. We will have a break, play TV games and card in the hotel room.
0100pm we will take the bus from our hotel and then will ride on a boat to the Jumbo Kingdom and will have some dim sum such as shrimp dumpling, siu mai, barbecue pork bun and roll noodle. There are the Jumbo is one of the world's largest floating restaurants
0200pm from Jumbo Kingdom we will take the bus to Ocean Park and played mobile game such as cable car, Ocean Park Tower and flying swing. We also did some shopping and visited the panda Jiajia, Anan and Lele. After that, we will take the bus to the hotel and will have a break. There are Entertainment, education and care Subject Park
07.00pm, we will take the bus from the hotel to Tsim Sha Tsui and will eat the characteristic Hong Kong food such as egg tarts, fish ball in curry sauce and fish ball with noodles in soup Wonton. Then we are going to visit the Avenue of Stars. There are descriptive Hong Kong milestones, kiosks with movie memorabilia
10.00pm we will take the bus back to hotel and check out. Then we are going to the airport by bus.
新一篇英文文章請人改一改
2008-10-05 3:13 am
回答 (3)
2008-10-05 3:22 am
✔ 最佳答案
你篇英文文,作得不錯. 但你好似沒有介紹過你個朋友. 你應該係開頭加: My friend call Xxxx. 如有疑問,可加我msn:[email protected]
參考: 我.我的個人經驗.
2008-10-05 3:56 am
斜體既我睇唔明你講乜野
粗體既係改動左既地方
06.00am
We will take the coach from our hotel to Stanley to swim,shop and have some English food. Next, we will take the coach back and have a break. There is fills the Western leisure lowdensity tourist area.
We will have a break, play TV games and card games inthe hotel room.
0100pm
We willride on a boat to the Jumbo Kingdom. Then we will have some dim sumsuch as shrimp dumpling, siu mai, barbecue pork bun and roll noodle.
There are the Jumbo is one of the world's largest floating restaurants.
0200pm
From Jumbo Kingdom, we will take the coach to Ocean Park and have fun with the rides such as cable car, Ocean Park Tower and flying swing. We will also dosome shopping there and visit the giant pandas Jiajia, Anan and Lele. After that,we will return to the hotel and will have a break.
There areEntertainment, education and care Subject Park
07.00pm
We will go to Tsim Sha Tsui and eat the characteristicHong Kong snacks such as egg tarts, curry fish ball and fishball noodles in soup Wonton. Then we will visit the Avenueof Stars. There are descriptive Hong Kong milestones, kiosks with moviememorabilia.
10.00pm
We will take the coach back, pack up all our luggage and check out. Then we are going to the airport.
最大既問題:
a.)A will XXXX, and YYYY
只要XXXX前面有一個will, 後面既 YYYY 就唔洗再will YYYY喇
b.)旅遊巴係coach , 唔係bus
所以, 冇問題?
完全正確?
希望幫到你 =]
2008-10-05 13:45:47 補充：
It is a tourist attraction of low density of buildings for relaxation here.
我譯呢句譯得唔好 =P
The Jumbo is one of the world's largest "floating" restaurants.
This is the place for entertainment and it is a conservative theme park. Also, it serves educational purpose.
粗體既係改動左既地方
06.00am
We will take the coach from our hotel to Stanley to swim,shop and have some English food. Next, we will take the coach back and have a break. There is fills the Western leisure lowdensity tourist area.
We will have a break, play TV games and card games inthe hotel room.
0100pm
We willride on a boat to the Jumbo Kingdom. Then we will have some dim sumsuch as shrimp dumpling, siu mai, barbecue pork bun and roll noodle.
There are the Jumbo is one of the world's largest floating restaurants.
0200pm
From Jumbo Kingdom, we will take the coach to Ocean Park and have fun with the rides such as cable car, Ocean Park Tower and flying swing. We will also dosome shopping there and visit the giant pandas Jiajia, Anan and Lele. After that,we will return to the hotel and will have a break.
There areEntertainment, education and care Subject Park
07.00pm
We will go to Tsim Sha Tsui and eat the characteristicHong Kong snacks such as egg tarts, curry fish ball and fishball noodles in soup Wonton. Then we will visit the Avenueof Stars. There are descriptive Hong Kong milestones, kiosks with moviememorabilia.
10.00pm
We will take the coach back, pack up all our luggage and check out. Then we are going to the airport.
最大既問題:
a.)A will XXXX, and YYYY
只要XXXX前面有一個will, 後面既 YYYY 就唔洗再will YYYY喇
b.)旅遊巴係coach , 唔係bus
所以, 冇問題?
完全正確?
希望幫到你 =]
2008-10-05 13:45:47 補充：
It is a tourist attraction of low density of buildings for relaxation here.
我譯呢句譯得唔好 =P
The Jumbo is one of the world's largest "floating" restaurants.
This is the place for entertainment and it is a conservative theme park. Also, it serves educational purpose.
2008-10-05 3:20 am
完全正碓呀,勁勁勁 不過你記得唔好依靠人
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