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我改後不知是否正確
From the airport, we will take the bus to hotel for checking in and will have a break. We will play TV game and card in the hotel room.
11.00am we will have lunch buffet in the hotel.
01.00pm we are going to the Hong Kong Park and will visit the Flagstaff House Museum of Tea Ware, the conservatory and the giant bird cage. There are oases of green amid the urban landscape and more than 150 species of birds.
04.00pm we will leave the Hong Kong Park and are going to the IFC Mall for shopping, we will eat Japanese food such as hand-pulled noodles, sushi and tempura.
08.00pm we are going to the City Hall and will watch a musical play. There are Hong Kong’s first public civic center.10.00pm we are going to Lan Kwai Fong and are going to some clubs. There are Hong Kong’s trendiest nightlife areas.