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At six o’clock in the morning, we took a bus from our hotel to Stanley for swimming, shopping and eating western food. Next, we took the bus back to the hotel and had a break. We played TV games and card in the hotel room.

At one o’clock in the afternoon, we took the bus from our hotel and then rode on a boat to the Jumbo restaurant and had some dim sum (no ,)such as shrimp dumpling, siu mai, barbecue pork bun and roll noodle.

At two o’clock in morning, from Jumbo we took the bus to Ocean Park and played mobile game such as cable car, Ocean Park Tower and flying swing. We also did some shopping and visited the panda Jiajia, Anan and Lele. After that, we took the bus to the hotel and had a break.

At seven o’clock in the evening, we took the bus from the hotel to Whampoa Gourmet Plaza and ate the characteristic Hong Kong food such as egg tarts, fish ball in curry sauce and fish ball with Wonton noodles. Then we went to visit the Avenue of Stars.

At ten o’clock in the evening, we took the bus back to hotel and check out. Then we went to the airport by bus.

如果這是一篇香港旅行簡易報告, i cannot use "I", its better to use "we".

At six o' clock in the morning, we can take the bus to Stanley, enjoying swimming, shopping and eating in some famous western style restaurants. Then, we can take the bus back to our hotel and take a rest. In the afternoon, we can take the bus to a pier and a boat to a floating restaurant called " Jumbo " we can eat some delicous dim sum and fried rice. After that, we can go to Ocean Park and play some games there,m kwe can go to the aquarium and we can visit the three pandas named JiaJia, AnAn, and LeLe. Next, we can go back to the hotel and take a shower. At seven o'clock, we can go to Whampo Gourmet Place and eat some famous food in Hong kong like egg tarts, Fish ball in curry, Wonton Noddles. After that, we can go to a famous street for tourist that called Avenun Of Stars and take some pictures.At ten o' clock, we can take the bus to the hotel and check off, then go back to the airport to check in for the flight.


++ better this time, try the peak next time

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it's barbeque
not barbecue.

At six o’clock in the morning. From our hotel, I can take the bus to Stanley and swimming, shopping and eat English food. Next, we can take the bus to hotel and brake. We can play TV games and card in the hotel room.
At one o’clock in morning, from our hotel, we can take the bus, boat to Jumbo and eat dim sum ,such as ha gau, siu mai, cha siu bau and cheung fan.
At two o’clock in morning, from Jumbo, I can take the bus, boat to Ocean Park and play mobile game such as cable car, Ocean Park Tower and flying swing, shopping and visit, such as jiajia, anan and lele. Text,we can take the bus to hotel and brake.
At seven o’clock in evening. from hotel, we can take the bus to Whampoa Gourmet Place and eat the characteristic food in Hong Kong such as egg tarts,Fish ball in curry sauce, Fish ball and Wonton noodles. Text we went to Avenue of Stars and visit.
At ten o’clock in evening.we can take the bus to hotel and check off,went to airport.

　　在早上六点。从我们的酒店出發，我可以乘坐公共汽车前往赤柱，游泳，购物，吃英语的食物。下一步，我们可以坐巴士到酒店。我们可以玩电视游戏和在酒店房间使用信用卡。
　　在一点钟在今天上午，来自我们的酒店，我们可以乘坐公共汽车，船珍宝，吃的点心，如公顷高，烧迈，茶烧包和祥的球迷。
在两点钟今天上午，来自珍宝，我可以乘坐公共汽车，船到海洋公园和播放移动游戏，如吊车，海洋公园大楼及飞行摆动，购物和参观，如佳佳， Anan和乐乐。文字，我们可以采取的巴士到酒店和刹车。
　　在七点钟在晚上。从酒店，我们可以乘坐公共汽车到黄埔美食广场，吃食物的特点在香港，如蛋挞，鱼球，咖喱酱，鱼丸和馄饨面条。文字我们去星光大道和访问。
　　十点钟在evening.我們可以乘坐公共汽车回酒店，检查行李后，前往机场迎接。