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A brief report on a one day schedule for sight seeing in Hong Kong. you should use past tense because this is a report on what had happened.

At seven o’clock in the morning, I took the bus to the airport and greet my friend. From the airport, we took the bus to hotel for checking in and had a break. We stayed in the hotel room playing TV game and card.

At eleven o’clock in morning, we had lunch buffet in the hotel.

At one o’clock in the afternoon, we went to the Hong Kong Park and visited the Flagstaff House Museum of Tea Ware, Hong Kong Visual Arts Centre, the giant bird cage and the conservatory.

At four o’clock in afternoon. We left the Hong Kong Park and went to the IFC Mall for shopping, playing basketball and reading book. (I am not sure that you can play basketball in IFC. If you think you can, then do not need to change. If this is untrue, then you better change to something like : having afternoon tea. If not your teacher may think that your plan is unreasonable.)

At seven o’clock in the evening, we had Japanese food such as hand-pulled noodles, sushi and tempura.

At eight o’clock in the evening, we went to the City Hall and watched a (for something that you will spend sometimes such as movies, TV, drama and musical, you should use “watch”, not “see) musical (no need to use “play” because musical already have the meaning of a play with a lot of music in the play). At ten o’clock at night, we went to Lan Kwai Fong and went to some clubs and had night snacks.

There are too many mistakes. I cannot find a correct sentence in the whole passage.

There are so many 'can' in the passage. None of them should be there. Delete each and every one of them.

You need help with your grammar. Talk to your teachers. Ask them to help you.

my version is going to be like this:

At seven o'clock in the morning, I can take the bus to the airport and greet my friends. Then, we can take shuttles from the Airport to the hotel and check-in. We can play TV games and card in the hotel room.

At eleven o'clock , we can have a buffet lunch in the hotel.

After that we can go to the Hong Kong Park and visit the Flagstaff House Museum of Tea Ware, Hong Kong visual Arts center bird watching and the consevatory.

Then we can go to the IFC mall nearby for shooping and eat japanese food like hand-pulled noddles, sushi and tempura. Next we went to the City Hall and see a musical play. Finally we went to a street called Lan Kwai Fong and enjoy the nigh life in Hong Kong.


++ if i am a teacher, this might be a C+ because you involved many time like at seven o clock, at 10 o'clock, try to use then, after that, or next, something like that. but goot structure, including all the good places in hong kong, try the peak next time.