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I have a younger sister. Her name is Kitty. Her hobby is drawing. She always draws in her bedroom. She has a white kitten that (call) -is called- Alice. It has a long tail and a pink ribbon on its neck. It is cute.
Last night, Kitty lied on the ground and drew a picture in her bedroom. There were a big house and some trees on the picture. Alice came in and waved its tail. It was standing near the picture and it was interested in it. Suddenly, it walked across the picture and there were some footprints on it because its feet were full of mud. Kitty glared at it becuase it is very naughty. She ran to dad's room and cried loudly. He asked -her- what (happen) -had happened0 to her. She (took) -showed him- her picture and told him what (happened) - had happened-. He asked her -,- " What does the footprint look like?" She thought -for- a long time and said " It (looked0 -looks- like flowers!" Then, she knew (how) -what- to do. She coloured the footprints with crayon. Finally, there were no more (printfoot) -footprints- on the picture. She said- "thank you"- to dad.

Quite a good writing of your own story. There are only small mistakes. I hope you will learn from them.

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