At the 27 of August, these was a S.1 training camp in my Secondary school. THis camp is
about in two days, and we needed to sleep in our classroom.
Afther going to the school,we changed our school uniform to be some causal wear. THen,
we had a march which was very tried. For half an hour, the march was already. So I could
have the lunch.
At nigth, we had another activate which was finding the picture in a very place. And
my favourite game is also this game.
The next day, when I waked up, I noticed my back is very pain. It was because the floor
of the classroom is too hard, so most of my classmats are get pain in their back.
In this camp, I though there is one thing I don't like, it was the floor is too hard!
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2008-09-17 8:25 pm
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2008-09-17 10:18 pm
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On 27th of August, my secondary school held a two days S.1 training camp. During that time, we had to sleep in our classroom and changed our school uniform to casual clothes after school. We had a tiring march for half an hour and when it ended, I had lunch. In the evening, we had a "treasure seeking" activity which includes us looking for an item around the camp. It was my favourite game.
The following morning, i woke up and notice that my back is acheing in pain. This is because we were only sleeping on the floor at night and many of my classmates also got acheing back, too.
Overall i enjoyed the camp but there is one thing i didn't like... that was sleeping on the hard floor!
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2008-09-17 10:18 pm
On the 27th August, a S.1 training camp was held in my secondary school.
This camp lasted two days, we had to sleep in our classroom.
After school finished, we changed our school uniforms into causal wears. We marched for half an hour. I felt very tired after the march, then we had lunch.
At night, we had another activity, which was also my favourite game. The game was about finding pictures in different places.
The second day, when i woke up, I noticed my back was very painful. It was caused by the hard floor of the classroom. This also affected most of my classmates. In this entire camp, the thing i hate the most is probably the floor being too hard!
This camp lasted two days, we had to sleep in our classroom.
After school finished, we changed our school uniforms into causal wears. We marched for half an hour. I felt very tired after the march, then we had lunch.
At night, we had another activity, which was also my favourite game. The game was about finding pictures in different places.
The second day, when i woke up, I noticed my back was very painful. It was caused by the hard floor of the classroom. This also affected most of my classmates. In this entire camp, the thing i hate the most is probably the floor being too hard!
2008-09-17 9:10 pm
At the 27th of August, there was a S.1 training camp in my Secondary school. This camp is about two days, and we needed to sleep in our classroom.
After going to the school, we changed our school uniform into some causal wear. Then, we had a half an hour march which was much tried. So I
have a lunch. At night, we had another activity which was finding the picture in a very dark place, it’s my favorite game. The next day, when I woke up, I noticed that my back is very painful. It was because the floor
of the classroom is too hard, so were most of my classmates. The one thing I don’t like about this camp it that we have to sleep on a very hard floor!
After going to the school, we changed our school uniform into some causal wear. Then, we had a half an hour march which was much tried. So I
have a lunch. At night, we had another activity which was finding the picture in a very dark place, it’s my favorite game. The next day, when I woke up, I noticed that my back is very painful. It was because the floor
of the classroom is too hard, so were most of my classmates. The one thing I don’t like about this camp it that we have to sleep on a very hard floor!
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