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Last Saturday night, I went to ( seeing) watch a Christian movie(,) (called) named "The Miracle Journey" .

I found it very touching and (deepen) moving messages were spread in this movie.

(With a ) Under the (moving) lyrical music and the meaningful scenes, my tear dropped (down) naturally - especially when I had heard the song " Amazing Grace" (sang from) sung by (one) the (illness) ill kid who suffered from leukemia.

What a (bliss) blissful night (at all) it was!

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Last Saturday night, I went to Watch a Christian movie, named "The Miracle Journey" .

It was very touching and had a very deep message within the movie.

With moving music and meaningful scenes, tears dropped down from my eyes - especially when I heard the song " Amazing Grace" being sung by an ill child who suffered from Leukemia.

What a blissful night!

Last Saturday night, I went to see a Christian movie which called "The Miracle Journey" .

The movie was really touching and presented a deeply message.

My tear dropped down by it's awesomely music and meaningful scene.Especially when I heard the song " Amazing Grace" which sang by a leukemic kid.

What a blissful night!!!

Last Saturday night, i went to see a christian movie,
called "The Miracle Journey".

It was very touching and had a deep message.

With a moving music and meaningful scene, my tear dropped down - especially when I heard the song " Amazing Grace" sang from one illness kid who suffered from leukemia.

What a bliss night overall!!!

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