改善英文行動 63. 希望大家盡力幫忙

happy

2008-08-21 1:13 am

希望大家盡力指出我錯處
狠心批改,不必留情.
並且希望說明錯的原因
感謝

I'm back!

Hello, I am back. It is 6 o'clock now and I just barely return to my home. I am very happy in last two weeks because I can see many relations of mine and my old friends. My hometown has changed a lot, from past many village to now a lot of flats and shops. Also, my friends take me to eat many special food which is very delicious.

These are a lot of things to tell you, but I need to clean my home due to dust. Thus, see you tomorrow!!

回答 (1)

Icecream0v0

2008-08-21 2:57 am

✔ 最佳答案

I'm back! (Don't repeat)

Hello(Hello is not good in here, so just use 'I am back'), I am back. It is
6 o'clock now and I just barely(barely is incorrect here, so use 'does')
return to my home. I am very happy in last two weeks because I can see
many relations of mine and my old friends. My hometown has changed
a lot, ('.' is better here)from past(we don't use 'from past' we use 'in the
old days') many village(put "s"!!!) to now(Full stop, and then say
'Now'. This sentence makes sense if you follow) a lot of flats and shops. Also, my friends take me to eat many special food('s'!!!) which is very delicious.

These are(Not 'these are' should be 'there are'!) a lot of things to tell
you, but I need to clean my home due to dust(no need 'due to dust').
Thus, see you tomorrow!!

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