請幫我譯一下英文的.(這是一封說服別人的信)

Dear mother,
Today I saw a new style portable telephone from the
television Regardless of its contour perhaps the function,
all are very good, with extremely attracts me!

Now I use the telephone has for used three years, the outer coveringto start to decolorize, moreover the function, the aspect isnot good
Starts slowly to drop Simultaneously the others hit for me,
my telephone are cannot !

Now I requested mother you may give me by a new portable telephone?
Had its me, you looks for my time, can be easy to find me! I may
all the time make the telephone with you Some times I also may listen
to the music, that does not need to buy more than 1 mp3 listening music, butfamily this section telephone also may photograph function, then I cannot want you to buy more than 1 cameras to give me
Mother, you buys for me, I can treasure it well, really very muchneeds it with me!

Dear mommy:

I saw a new moblie phone form the tv today. Its appearance and functions are extremely excellent, it attracts me very much. I would like to buy it.

The main point is i have already used my old mobile phone for 3 years. Its outer shell is starting to fade. Also, its fuctions and sounds is really bad now. There isn't any ringtones when someone is calling me. Therefore, i don't know if there are anyone is calling me sometimes.

Senondly, if i have a new mobile phone, you may call me easily. And i can call you whenever too=]. Thirdly, i can listen to music with this mobile phone ,so that i don't have to buy a mp3. Fourthly, this mobile phone can takes photos, so that i don't have to buy a camera.

Lastly, if i buy this mobile phone now. There are some preferential benefit, which is reduce 1000 dollars and a international roaming phone card free.

All in all, I request mommy may let me buy a new mobile phone. I will treasure it extremely well. And i extremely extremely need it.

love from,
[ your name ]


我建議你加上型號資料,,價錢個d 會說服力大d
以上既信,, 同你既原文有小小出入,,
次序轉左,,同埋加左一兩句野
咁樣好似寫出黎冇咁怪,,同埋說服力大d=]

由於我是學生,, 雖然文法可能及不上上班一族
但係作文寫信也不生疏=]
老師教,, 寫推銷信要打point,,主題句,,
咁樣先清楚,,易睇=]
雖然寫俾長輩,, 不過都係俾媽媽,, 所以informal都ok啦=]

Dear Mummy(informal):

Today, I saw a new mobile phone from the television. Its appearance
and function is excellent and it attracts me very much!

I have used my mobile phone for three years already. The casing's
colour is starting to fade. And the function, voice of the mobile phone
is starting to decrease. When someone calls to me, my mobile phone
never rings!

Now, I request Mummy(you) to buy a new mobile phone for me. Is
that okay? If you bought that, I can call to you anytime. Sometimes I
can also listen to music, so you don't have to buy one more mp3 to me.
And this instance, this mobile has the ability to take pictures too! With
that, you don't have to buy another camera for me.

Mummy, please, can you buy it for me? I really need it!

P.S. If you buy at this moment, you will get a discount: reduce the
price 1000dollars, and a global telephone card.