which sentence is better?

2008-08-07 6:45 am
Workers employed by the trade union which represents airline pilots are staging a 24-hour strike after talks aimed at resolving a row over pensions broke down.

Workers employed by the trade union, which represents airline pilots, are staging a 24-hour strike after talks aimed at resolving a row over pensions broke down.

Workers employed by the trade union that represents airline pilots are staging a 24-hour strike after talks aimed at resolving a row over pensions broke down.

source:1st paragraph in
http://uk.news.yahoo.com/pressass/20080806/tuk-pilots-strike-in-row-over-pensions-6323e80.html

sorry, i am not good at writing long sentence....
更新1:

please try to give reason for your choice

回答 (3)

2008-08-07 11:30 am
✔ 最佳答案
Workers employed by the trade union which represents airline pilots are staging a 24-hour strike after talks aimed at resolving a row over pensions broke down. – This sentence is too long so readers cannot easily figure out who is who and who did what.

Workers employed by the trade union, which represents airline pilots, are staging a 24-hour strike after talks aimed at resolving a row over pensions broke down. – This sentence is best because the commas make a clear separation of the relationship and its corresponding action.

Workers employed by the trade union that represents airline pilots are staging a 24-hour strike after talks aimed at resolving a row over pensions broke down. – This sentence has the same problem of the first sentence.
參考: Myself
2008-08-17 2:34 am
BAGGIO, you are missing a 'the' in front of the word 'best'.
2008-08-07 6:52 am
Workers employed by the trade union which represents airline pilots are staging a 24-hour strike after talks aimed at resolving a row over pensions broke down
勞工使用附近表現航線飛行員的職業工會在不帶女伴參加晚會24-小時罷工之後談話指望解決輕易劃蠃養老金故障.
參考: 書名


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