改善英文行動 60. 希望大家盡力幫忙

2008-08-04 6:13 am

希望大家盡力指出我錯處
狠心批改,不必留情.
並且希望說明錯的原因
感謝

My dream home

My dream home is luxurious. There are a lot of beautiful maids for looking after me and managing my house. In addition, I have a big garden which many kinds of cute animals live in. Apart from that, the house is environmentally friendly so the house can utilize the thunder for producing electricity. What's more, my house contains a lot of rooms for my gusts so they can reside here as long as they want. At last, it has a large computer room in my house which can give a place for me to play with my friends.

回答 (1)

[匿名]

2008-08-05 4:38 am

✔ 最佳答案

1. 題目是My dream home不是My dream house，故文章除了寫出設施外也要寫出home的感覺，即有什麼人或情在內。
2. There are a lot of helpful maids to look after me and take care of the house.
3. 住在big garden的應是pets，因animal包括一些wild animals.
4. ..the house can utilize the thunder應改作 so people / we can utilize...
5....my house contains a lot of rooms for my gusts應為There are a lot of rooms in my house. My guests can reside in them as long.....
6. It has a computer....應為There is a large computer room in my house where I can play computer games with my friends.
希望幫到你。

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