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My friends and I were having (no need to use “had” since your stomach problem happened the same time during lunch.) lunch in a restaurant. Suddenly, I got a stomachache and (no said because using “excused” already mean you said excuse me to your friends) excused myself to my friends.
I ran to toilet as fast as I could. After a while (why after a while ? because the toilet was outside the restaurant ? Suggest to change to : After searching around in the restaurant), I saw a toilet for man and went into it quickly. However, I saw a girl looking at me when I entered the toilet. What the hell!!! (It is okay to say “what the hell” here, in fact it highlighted your feeling. However in formal writing please do not use this phrase because it is considered as colloquial only. May be you can say : Oh my goodness !)I said sorry to the girl (we use girl instead of “her” here because your mentioned in your latter part of essay that it was a boy) immediately and then rushed (add rush to describe how quickly you wanted to leave) out of the toilet. I was lucky because she didn't yell (no out, in fact using “scream” is better than “yell” because yell has a meaning of scolding people, while you were just afraid that she would scream because you went into a toilet for woman.).
Due to my urging stomach problem I looked at (not saw because saw does not have the underline meaning of examine, and that was what you were doing) the sign on the door of the toilet again, but it really was a boy’s figure. Did she go to the wrong toilet ? Did I need to tell her the truth? During that moment, a boy pushed the toilet door (remember you are still standing outside the toilet) and said (no that) "Are you ok, Tony?". The girl said "I am ok and I am going with you now."
2008-07-30 03:54:09 補充:
The girl was a boy ! But he really looked like a girl. How ridiculous (we do not use impossible because it is actually possible.
2008-07-30 03:54:23 補充:
So the punch line, that is, the final sentence of your essay that summing up your feeling or used as a concluding sentence, should not be “impossible”, but “ridiculous”) it was!!!