改善英文行動 33. 希望大家盡力幫忙

If you were asked to organize a class party, how would you make it a success?

I think a successful class party is that students need NOT pay a lot of money to join in and the party must be entertaining. HERE, I HAVE GOT some ideas which can make the party MORE entertaining.

First, each student can make some snacks or dishes by themselves for the party because it can PROVIDE MORE CHOICES of food.

each students (單數名詞, 所以不用加s) => each student

Also, students can SAVOUR each other's special food in the party.

我建議改用以下其中一種方法, 代替Eat
- Savour (慢慢)品嘗 = taste appreciatively e.g. savor the soup
- Taste (小量)試…味道
- Try the flavour of some food

The most important thing is that the food are made by students, so it is cheaper than buying some food FROM a restaurant. THAT'S WHY students NEED NOT PAY TOO MUCH to join in the party.

Secondly, students can divide THEMSELVES INTO SEVERAL GROUPS to GIVE their performances, such as dramas, stand-up comedy and singing etc.

- Group 和performance都加s
- prepare 改用 give

It not only GIVES a chance to students to show their talents, but also MAKES the party MORE ENTERTAINING.

- Give 和 make 都加 s
- Entertainment (n) 娛樂 , 而 entertaining (a) 富娛樂性

Apart from THE above, I will design some games which can IMPROVE the friendship AMONG classmates. For example, ONE PERSON STANDS on a PIECE OF paper, AND then TURNS his/ HER body in order to get enough space for his group members to stand ON IT TOGETHER.

- 在"... the friendship between classmates ..."當中, 我唔會選用between, 因為between只用於兩個人/物之間, 我改用among

At last, the group WITH THE most people STANDING ON THE SAME PIECE OF paper WILL BE the winner. THROUGH THE game, THEY can train their co-operation.

Needless to say, I will prepare some presents that can make students excited, crazy and happy in the party.

Make sb/ sth adjective 本身己經有令…(變成)某一個狀態, 所以Become 是不需要的。我個人認為, 如果少一個字都可以同樣表達到你的意思, 那麼, 這個字就不需要了!