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Should schools spend money advertising themselves?

Schools should not spend money advertising themselves. Firstly, why do schools need to advertise themselves? In order to get more money for the school?(Why for the school ?) For the students? (Here you should specify for what regarding students, e.g. to let more students know about the school, etc.) for honor? (Honor is even more vague than the school or the students, you have to tell why there is a relationship between advertising and honor, for example – so more people can know about the school and then the school become famous). If schools are good, they do not need to waste any money advertising themselves because children should be willing to be their students. Then, those schools will become well-known gradually.

I think only private schools will need to advertise themselves, because they want to earn money so that they need to advertise how good they are. Thus, parents and children should not trust those advertisements easily.
Note :
The content this time is quite weak, because you have not elaborate each point clearly to let the reader understand what you want to say. If you look at your original passage you will find that you have not really use your points fully. You might have some ideas in mind but due to the lack of rational in your essay, those points were not explained. Please take note and let me know if you think otherwise.

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