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Your thoughts are very interesting to say the least.... anyhow.

How will you stop yourself becoming poor when you are old?
^^ You don't say you "stop yourself (from) becoming poor" Poor
is such a general term, apparantly you meant financially poor.

I may title the question as "How do you ensure a financially secured retirement"




Firstly, I will work hard in the company in order to be admired by my boss,
^^your boss won't "admired" you. And the thinking shouldn't be just to impress
the boss. It's all about you contributing, and making a difference in the company.
And by doing so, you will hold a higher position, and higher pay.

thus having a good position and earn more money.
Also, I will save money and buy some falts to ensure that my living is normal
when I resigning.
^^There is no such thing as a "normal" living. You meant you want to maintain
your living standard when you resign (not resigning).

Apart from that, I will teach my children are filial piety to
^^ I felt you tried too hard to use connecting words. It became too obvious.

me so that they will give money to me when they are becoming adults.
^^ You don't say "give monety to me". You say something like "hopefully my
children would support me financially..." And not "they are becoming".


If I do
(the) above steps, I will not become poor when I am old.
^^ can't use "will", how do you know it will happen for sure?

(If you are giving a short answer, using “Firstly” to get started is okay.
But if you are writing an essay, you might want to start with a short paragraph instead.)

How to avoid being poor when you get old? This question came to my mind after I watched the TV show about how those poor elderly people make their living. Different person has different opinion. To me, a plan is what we need to get start with. At work, I will work very hard to achieve a higher position in the company, thus will have a higher income. When I have earned enough money, I will invest in real estate and let my money grow. This will ensure a normal standard of living for me when I retire. Family education is also important. I will teach my children about filial piety. Hopefully, when my children grow up, they will support me both financially and mentally. If I follow my plan, I believe I will not become poor when I get old.

(Hope this is helpful for you. Feel free to make any changes. Good luck.)