請幫我檢查我的英文翻譯, 看有沒有錯誤, 謝謝

唔得。
因為其實呢度係三句，要分開先解得通，你英文將變左兩句啦。加返ｄ標點易睇ｄ：
其他小鳥都跟著氣流，向上飛走了，
為何只有你逆流而飛？
跟著我一起，向下沈下去。（你o既譯本就將問題伸延到呢度，咁就解唔通啦）
另外 tense 亦有問題。我o既譯法，參考下：
All other birds have followed the air current and risen.
Why do you fly against it alone?
Follow me and go down.

All the other birds follow the airflow, flying upwards.
Why do you go against it and sink down with me?

希望最少的改動, 能保留你原文的風格!!

岩.

你都可以咁寫:
The other with birdies all air, the upward fly away
Why only you and fly countercurrent
I join with, continue to sink~

Other birds follow the airflow and flying upwards.
Why are you flying against the airflow only and sinking down through
the airflow with me?