有人能幫我看一下英文有錯嗎?

2008-06-04 4:31 am
I have already watched a movie is concerning a boy who likes ballet, how

become a ballet dancer.

Originally thinking is a set of film of tediousness, but unexpected BE, this

movie accident of interesting,

And pretty much encourage public, make person red-blooded to seethe!

I have never wanted to struggle for dreaming of and I am so red-blooded to

seethe!

n age isn't young and the type of figure isn't beautiful, even the family isn't a

satisfactory ballet teacher either,

Her business not exactly is fascinating, teach a dance, seem to only is each 50

pennies of student's every time

She, still have a dream?Have, she still loves ballet.When find the boy's in the

sky, also have to the passion for dancing and

she doesn't need his school fees and even puts forth to teach alone.This is

complete oneself to know love material towards dancing of having a passion

for,

again because that has a passion for kind and genial good, and.


A personality just strong father, for supporting labor union exercise, prefer to a

life Jie Ju, also insist participation strike.He wants the son to learn boxing,

where can accept him to learn ballet?Once blamed to once force as well,

afterwards see the kid's in the sky and zeal, be a father, finally want what to

insist is what?He finally rather gives up conviction, loses sense of honor and

sells a house to be and also want to help a kid to pursue better future.

To make track for a dream need to be paid, returning may is super than paying

of a person.To reach a dream had better be with talent, more important of but is

a personal effort and persisten

回答 (3)

2008-06-04 5:16 am
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There appears many mistakes in word choice, grammar, and others. Below is what I corrected:
The movie I watched is about how a ordinary boy who likes ballet very much become a professional ballet dancer. I thought that it would be tedious and dull but unexpectedly it is interesting. Since in real life, I have never believed in dreams, this encouraging movie touched me deeply.
His passionate teacher is a big force behind him. Although she only earns a modest income of $50 pennies, she teaches him for free. She is much touched by the boy's passion in ballet and wants him succeed. His strong and stubborn father finally accepted the boy's wish and supports him to go to ballet school by selling the house.
Through this story, I have learned that a person can pursue his hopes successfully if he is persistent and convinced enough. One should not easily give up a dream. If the boy has given up his dream, he would not have succeeded being a successful dancer.
2008-06-04 8:07 am
"see movie" "watch TV"

Interested and Interesting
" I am interested in something"
" something is interesting"


A lot of Running sentences.
and the sentences contain no subjects and Objects.
I don't understand what you are trying to talk about.
2008-06-04 5:02 am
I have watched a movie WHO TALKS ABOUT a boy who likes ballet AND how HE LATER becomeS a ballet dancer.

Originally I THINK IT is a TEDIOUS FILM, but UNEXPECTEDLY, this

movie IS VERY INTERESTING and IT ATTRACTS MANY PEOPLE TO WATCH THIS MOVIE.

I never WORK HARD TO struggle for MY DREAMS. BUT THE BOY IN THIS FILM, HE IS TOO OLD TO LEARN BALLET AND HIS BODY FIGURE IS NOT GOOD ENOUGH TO BE A DANCER. THEN THERE IS A WOMAN THAT TEACHES BALLET. ALTHOUGH SHE DOESN'T TEACH REALLY WELL AND SHE CAN"T MAKE MANY MONEY, IT ONLY COSTS 50 CENTS FOR EACH LESSON. STILL, SHE HAS HER DREAM AND SHE LOVES BALLET. WHEN SHE FINDS OUT THE BOY WHO FEELS PASSION ABOUT DANCING, SHE DOESN'T REQUIRE HIM TO PAY FOR THE SCHOOL FEE AND SHE OFFERS PRIVATE LESSONS FOR HIM.

BUT HIS FATHER WANTS HIS SON TO LEARN BOXING AND HE DOESN'T ALLOW HIM TO LEARN BALLET.BUT AFTER SEEING HIS SON'S PERFORMANCE, HE DECIDES TO HELP HIS SON TO PURSUE HIS DREAM. HE SELLS HIS HOUSE TO GET MORE MONEY.

TO FULFILL OUR DREAM, WE NEED TO PAY. HOWEVER, THE RETURNING ALWAYS MEANS MORE THAN THE PAY.IF YOU WANT TO FULFILL YOUR DREAM, THE MOST IMPORTAN THING IS PUT MORE EFFORTS INTO IT AND BE PERSISTENT.

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** the words which CAPS LOCK are the words that I have changed
hope it helps
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