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Good morning, the topic that I am going to present you today is School Picnic !
Next Saturday, we will have a school picnic. I will go to the picnic with my teachers and classmates at Sai Kung Country Park . I’m excited (here excited is just an adverb, not past tense) to this school picnic with my classmates because this will be my last (no once, because when you say last, you already have the meaning that this is the last one) school picnic in this School.

After lunch time, my classmates and I are going to plan on this picnic. We will discuss what to do and bring for the barbecue. After this, we are going to decide what food to buy such as snacks, fruits, chicken wings, steaks and cokes for the barbecue. My teacher reminds us not to forget to bring our camera because the Country Park has beautiful view.

On that day, we will gather at the School .And about ten o’clock, we will leave school and we will take a school bus to go to the Country Park . The bus ride will take us an hour to arrive the Park. Then we will walk for another twenty minutes before we can reach the barbecue site. When we arrive there, we will (no be) start our lunch. After the barbecue, we will play some games. We will play hide and seek, flying kites and badminton. Before we leave we will take some group pictures. At about 5 o’clock, we will go back to the School and dismiss.

I hope the weather will be fine on next Saturday so we can enjoy a happy day !

This is the end of my presentation. Thank you !

Good morning everybody, I will now start my presentation:

Next Saturday, I will have a school picnic. I will be going for a picnic with my teachers and classmates at Sai Kung Country Park. I’m looking forward to this picnic with my classmates, because it is my last school picnic.

Sometime ago, my classmates and I were planning this picnic. We were discussing what to do and bring for the picnic. We decided on a barbeque. At last, we decided to buy some food such as snacks, fruits, chicken wings, steaks and soft drinks for the barbecue. My teacher reminded us not to forget to bring our cameras because the barbeque area has a beautiful view.

When that day comes, we will set off from school . At about ten o’clock, we will leave school and take the school bus for an hour. Then we will have to walk for another twenty minutes before we reach the barbecue site. When we arrive there, it will be the start of our lunch. After barbecue, we will play some games. It will include hide and seek, kite flying and badminton. Before we leave we will take some group pictures. At about 5o’clock, we will go back and dismiss from school.

Now, I hope the weather will be fine on next Saturday.
This is the end of my presentation.

Good morning, I (am going to) tell you my presentation:
(A school picnic will be on next saturday.) I will go to picnic with (our) teacher and classmates at Sai Kung Country Park. I’m (excited) to have a picnic with my classmates. Because it is my last one school picnic.
(My classmates and I planed this picnic after lunch.) We (discussed) what to do and bring for the barbecue. Then, we (decided) to buy some food (like) snacks, fruits, chicken wings, steaks and cokes for the barbecue. (And) (our) teacher (reminded) us (to) bring our camera because (there is) beautiful view.
(On) that day, we will (meet) at the school (in the early morning). (About) ten o’clock, we (will) leave school (and) take (the) school bus for one hour. Then we will walk for another twenty minutes before we (reach) the barbecue (area). When we arrive there, (we will start) our lunch. After barbecue, we will play some games. (Such as) hide and seek, flying kites and badminton. (Finally,) we will take some group pictures (before we leave). At about 5o’clock, we will go back (school for dismission.)

Now, I hope the weather (will be) fine on next Saturday.

This is the end of my presentation.