各位高手幫我英文改文

以下有兩篇文,一篇係用英文作,因為我英文不太好,所作的英文句子可能表達不到我想說的意思,所以另外用中文寫了一篇!希望各位高手能夠把我英文那篇的句子糾正和改到似中文那篇的意思!令外請幫我寫一斷少少的conclusion.

In the story, I like the character is Frankenstein because he is an absorbed person. We can see his merit in the two main things, study and love.

Firstly, let’s see his study! When his mother died, Frankenstein wanted to know the secret of life. He studied hardworking and asked his professors about alive problem unceasingly. I think our studying cannot move to this level. When he began to create the monster, he did not spend his time to reply Elizabeth’s letter. When Elizabeth came to his laboratory and wanted to stop his experiment, Frankenstein expels her immediately. These things can show when Frankenstein was studying, nobody can harass him.
Secondly, he is an absorbed person in the love between Elizabeth and him. When Elizabeth was killed by the monster, he put Elizabeth’s head in the woman monster body and he wanted to Elizabeth live again. Elizabeth became an ugly monster, but Frankenstein didn’t become his love for Elizabeth. This show Frankenstein’s absorbed for love. Every people like beautiful things, (請幫我作下去)



在這個故事中我最喜歡Frankenstein,因為他是一個專一的人,他的這種優點可以從他對這兩種事看出,分別是對知識的追求和對Elizabeth的愛.
首先,讓我們看看他怎樣專一地學習!他的媽媽死了,令他對生命的神秘產生興趣,所以他在大學特別努力,不斷追問老師問題.試問我有多少個人可以讀得好像他一樣?當他在製造monster時,他沒有花多餘時間回信給Elizabeth.當Elizabeth去到他的實驗室想阻止他的硏究時, Frankenstein把Elizabeth拉走!這能證明Frankenstein想做一樣事時是沒有人能阻止的專一性!
其次,他對Elizabeth的愛也非常專一.當她被monster所殺時, Frankenstein立即把Elizabeth的頭移到woman monster的頭上,一心一意希望Elizabeth能夠復活.當Elizabeth變成醜陋的woman monster時,Frankenstein對Elizabeth的愛依然沒有改變.人是愛美的動物,但能做到Frankenstein的地步又有多少個?他對Elizabeth不離不棄,致死不如的專一,令我心感佩服!
(差conclusion)

我通常作文堂上所得的平語:poor sentence structure makes your ideas difficult to follow ,add more sentence+poor editing!!!!

請各位高手幫我改寫篇文,合乎老師要求! 如果你們指出我的文法和用詞的錯誤加以糾正會更好!

(注不要軟件譯完就算!)