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1. Hong Kong is a very stressful city (no among) in the world.

2. Numerous people do not have enough time to eat their lunch or even do not have a lunch break.

3. This situation occurs (no is) because we have no law to protect them.

4. Actually, quite a few companies do not provide lunch break for their staff. (labour refers mostly to those who use their hands to work instead of those sitting in the office, but I guess this is not your original meaning.)

5. One of the (what organization ? Here you can use employee /labour benefit organizations) organizations propose that we should have lunch breaks to ensure all working class will have employee’s right. (welfare is not good enough because having lunch break is actually a right, not a welfare.).

6. According to reliable report (no said that) lots of companies in Hong Kong , like A.B.C, do (we use do here because you are talking about lots of companies) not allow their staff to have lunch breaks.

7. Definitely, it is harmful for the workers since all of them are affected by this policy.

8. The main opposite voice is coming from the business sectors.

9. The finance sector and the media sector find it difficult to give their employees a necessary break. - correct

10. Since these two sectors rely very much on the availability of instant information. - correct

11.If their employees are not there when the information arrives, the companies will suffer losses.

12. In fact, we often find that many Hong Kong (no need for 's) labors are working overtime frequently.

13. Unfortunately, they cannot (no be able to) gain any profit despite of their contribution.

14. In order to make our employees to be more efficient, I think (no the) lunch breaks are certainty essential to all employees!

Hong Kong is a quite stressful city compare to others in the world.

Numerous people don't have sufficient time to eat lunch nor get a lunch break.

We made this situation because don't have laws to protect them.

Actually, there are quite a few companies that doesn't provide lunch break for their labor.

One of the organization proposed that we should have lunch breaks in order to ensure labor in having employee welfare.

According to reliable report, it had said that a lot of companies in Hong Kong like A.B.C doens't allow tehir workder to get lunch breaks.
7.Definitely, it is harmful for workers since all of them may affected by this policy.
It is definitely harmful for thier workers since it may affect them.
8.The main opposite voice is coming from business sector.
The main opposing voice is coming from business sector.
9.The finance sector and the media sector find it difficult to give their employees a necessary break.
The finance sector and the media sector found it difficult to give their employees a necessary break.
10.Since these two sectors rely very much on the availability of instant information.
This iis not a sentence, it cant' not end with a period.
11.If their employees are not there when the information comes, the companies will suffer losses.
.If their employees are not there when the information comes, the companies will suffer from dramatic lost.
12.In fact, we often find that many Hong Kong's labors are working overtime on their work.
correct
13.Unfortunately, they cannot be able to gain their effort.
Unfortunately, they were not able to gain thier right.
14.In order to make our employees to be more efficient, I think the lunch breaks certainty essential to employees.
in order to make our employees more efficient, lunch break is essential to employees

1.Hong Kong is a very stressful city in the world.

2.Numerous of people do not have enough time to eat lunch or a lunch break.

3.There is no law to prevent this situation.

4.Actually, there are a few companies do not provide lunch break for their employees.

5.One of the organization proposed that all employees should have lunch breaks as part of the employees welfare.

6.According to the reliable report said that a lot of companies in Hong Kong, like A.B.C, ddi not allow their workers to have lunch break.

7.Definitely, it is harmful for the workers as they are all affected by this policy.

8.The main opposite voice is coming from business sector.

9.The finance sector and the media sector find that is difficult to give their employees a necessary break.

10.Since these two sectors relied on the same information.

11. The companies will suffered the lost, if the information arrived and their employees are not there to receive it.

12.In fact, we often find that many Hong Kong employees are working overtime all the time.

13.Unfortunately that they cannot be able to gain their effort.

14.In order to make our employees work more efficiency, lunch break is the most essential need for all the employees.

1.Hong Kong is a very stressful city in the world.

2.Numerous people do not have enough time to eat lunch or not have a lunch break.

3.Not law protecting them causes this situation to occur.

4.Actually, quite a few companies do not provide lunch break for their labor.
Note: 現在式表示是一種習慣; labor 為不可數名詞

5.One of the organizations proposes that we should have lunch breaks to ensure labor to have employee welfare.
Note: One of the + plural noun + singular verb; ensure + somebody + to infinitive

6.According to reliable report, lots of companies of Hong Kong, like A.B.C, do not allow their workers to have lunch breaks.

7.It,definitely, is harmful for workers since all of them may be affected by this policy badly.
Note: 因為affect係中性, 前面講了harmful, 後面加返badly比較準確

8.The main opposite voice is coming from business sectors.

9.The finance sector and the media sector find it difficult to give their employees a necessary break.

10.These two sectors rely on the availability of instant information very much.
Note: Since係連接用, 用來連接兩句, 這裡不適用

11.If their employees are not there when the information comes, the companies will suffer losses.

12.In fact, we often find that many Hong Kong's labors are working overtime.

13.Unfortunately, they cannot gain their effort.

14.In order to make our employees more efficient, I think the lunch breaks are certaintly essential to them.

1.Hong Kong is a quite stressful city in the world.

2.Numerous of people do not have enough time to eat lunch , even haven't lunch break.

3. Since we have not law to protect them, this situation is occurred.

4.Actually, quite a few companies have not provided lunch break for their labors.

5.One of the organization proposes that we should have lunch break to ensure labors having the employee welfare.

6.According to a reliable report, lots of companies in Hong Kong, like A.B.C, do not allow their workers to have lunch break.

7.Definitely, it is harmful to workers since all of them may affected by this policy.

8.The main opposite voice is coming from business sectors.

9.The finance sector and the media sector find that it is difficult to give their employees a necessary break.

10.Since these two sectors rely much on the availability instant information.

11.If their employees are not there when the information comes, the companies will suffer losses.

12.In fact, we often find that many Hong Kong's labors are working overtime .

13.Unfortunately, they are not able to gain their efforts.

14.In order to make our employees more efficient, I think the lunch break is certainty essential.