i would like to ask the below sentence ok to not?

這句可以改為：
For your inquiry, you should ask Peter for he is now resposible for any Negotiate Agency Agreement.
或
For your inquiry, you should ask Peter for he is now the person responsible for Negotiate Agency Agreement.
希望幫到你！

2008-05-05 14:22:03 補充：
其實並不用說in his new capacity這句，老外說話不會多用贅言，只會說：他是負責ｘｘｘ，而不會說：他在他的新職位負責ｘｘｘ之言。

For this inquiry, I think you should ask Peter since he is in his new capacity
will be responsible for Negotiate Agency Agreements.

Peter (Chan) is the right person to answer your question regarding Negotiate Agency Agreements.

This is the simplest, clear & understandable sentence against yours. The person, Peter, you better added with his last name to prevent from mixed with other Peters.

I suggest to change the sentence to :

For this inquiry, I think you should ask Peter since he is in his new capacity which includes responsibility to negotiate agency agreement.

Reason for the change is :
he is in his new capacity will be responsible for Negotiate Agency Agreements
You have two verb-to-be here without a connective such as “which”

thank you!!

都ok呀~~但如果用you may/you can會唔會好d呢, 聽落好似比you should客氣d咁...