幫我檢查英文自傳的用法及文法囉~

I’m XXX, my major was Department of Applied English when I studied in Southern Taiwan University, I also had much of interest to the International Trade, so I attended the international trade curriculum of Bureau of Employment and Vocational Training after graduated from school, in order to enriched own trade knowledge

I had a few work experiences. My first job experience was a sales assistant in an Import company, my key responsibilities were processing national and international purchase orders, organizing export related events, communicating with clients and ensure correct delivery date, etc.
The hard work and effort I put into my role was recognized and I was later on promoted to be a sale representative ,my key responsibilities were : Developing client and Searching foreign supplier.
As a sale representative in a shock absorber manufacturer was My second job experience, during the period of time, I have participated the SEMA show which is the biggest exhibition of auto parts in Las Vegas and have been to the Essen Exhibition in Germany for visited the show and developed the client who needs OEM Service, although inauguration period only have eight months, here also benefit me greatly.
During this busy period, I learnt time management, how to prioritize and became more efficient dealing with the tasks that were assigned to me.
Now I am attending the course in English cram school for improving my language ability and stronger my communication skills.
本人就讀於大學期間，雖非國際貿易科系,但因為對貿易非常有興趣,在畢業後皆在貿易公司某職.第一份貿易工作,在一間進口公司助理之職位,從下訂單給國外廠商到安排貨物進口,進出貨事項,及國外廠商及國內客戶接洽,之後晋升為貿易人員,開發訂單及找尋國外配合之廠商.
第二份就職的公司為避震器製造廠,專銷往國外,也於其中擔任國貿人員一職,,曾隨著公司參加美國SEMA SHOW,及前往參觀德國ESSEN EXHIBITION並開發客戶,雖然就職期間只有8個月,但在這短期內也讓我獲益良多.