correct these sentences!

1, I think parents should take up some responsibility for this situation.
(SHARE responsibility WITH somebody)

2, Parents have given their children too much freedom and may have neglected the importance of communication with their children.
(家長一直以來都給予他們的子女太多自由.而不是依家呢刻先俾)
(我估你想講家長只係忽略左同子女既溝通而不是佢地太多野做而冇時間同子女溝通)

3, Therefore, generation gap may exist between parents and children, especailly teenagers.
(家長nor子女其實都冇"generation gap"這樣東西.但generation gap存在在佢地中間)

4, Teenagers who lack parental care may easily stray.
(lack作動詞時後面不用加 of)
(不知將佢rephrase左會唔會好似順一點?)

5, They will use another thing to substitute parental love and care.
[/They will seek another way to fill up their loneliness.]
(method係方法.但parental care係一樣野.所以不能用方法取代一樣野)

6, For example, they may attempt smoking, stealing, drinking, abusing drug and so on.
(to後面除gerund外其他verb都不用加ing)
(will係一定會.但我估他們不一定會去食煙甚至吸毒掛)
(其實文法上try to do sth或try doing sth都岩.但在這裡的意思後者會比較正確)

7, [no problem]

8, We cannot blame them since they are too young and immature.
(前面寫them即assume人地知你講緊邊個.後面就不用又提番係teenagers)
(或你可以將前面的them改為the teenagers.後面就用they)

9, Actions should be taken by the government in order to improve the situation such as re-educating the parents and increasing the amount of social workers.
(such as後要名詞.所以那個動詞要加ing)
(其實我地好難可以做d咩.但政府做會比較可行吧.不過其實你那句的前段文法完全冇問題的)

p.s.其實你d idea幾好!繼續努力!=)

1.I think parents should bear some responsibility for this situation.

2.Parents give their children too much freedom but too little time to communicate.

3.Therefore parents and their children, especially for teenagers, have generation gap.

4.Most teenagers may easily stray due to the lack of parental love and care.

5.They will look for substitute for parental love and care.

6.For example, they will try smoking, stealing, drinking, drug abuse and so on.

7.They also want to attract parents' attention.

8.We cannot blame them since teenagers are too young and immature.

9.We should do our best to help them such as re-educating parents to correct concept, arranging more social workers to help them, etc.