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The first adventure they had was that they overcome a storm and stayed on the North Pole for 10 days. Fortunately, they were very safe. Yet terrible beginning suggested (No an) impending disasters one after another. One day, Roo decided to go home. The old man persuaded her repeatedly until she changed her mind. In a little while, they set foot on the Walrus Bay and really started their trip on land. However, the weather was extremely bad that when they wanted to go out and looked for the polar bears they could not even get out of their tent. They felt very hungry and tired. Eventually, the saw the polar bear and left the North Pole safely.