請改正這些句子。

Hi, please make sure you put a space after 1. or 2.
1. Young people are easily become addicted to computer games. - correct

2.They like playing computer games because they feel bored and do not want to study.

3. They play games on the computer so that they can avoid work or reality and indulge in daydreaming. (Indulge has to be followed by in, then followed by a gerund.)

4. However, if they spend too much time playing with computer, they will be distracted from their studies.

5. Most students like to play overnight and easily become ill because they do not have enough sleep. - correct

6. They also spend a lot of money to buy new games. - correct

7. It wastes them a lot of money.

8. If they instead use this money to do other meaningful things, such as buying reference book and donating, (this sentence is not finished, right ?)

9. Family relations can be affected because these teenagers do not have time to communicate with their families and cause many arguments (with whom ?).

10. Computer games are not all bad, however. Some provide us with knowledge and other can help us to relax.

11. The key is to do everything in a moderate manner.

1.Young people are easily addicted to computer games.

2.They like playing computer games and do not want to study because they think it is boring.

3.They play computer games so that they can avoid work or reality and keep on the daydreaming.

4.However, if they spend too much time playing, they will be distracted from their studies

other5-11！I don't not

1.Young people are easily become addicted to computer games.
"are" is deleted.
It is preferable to put "easily" at the end of the sentence.

2.They like playing computer games that is they feel bored and do not want to study.
"that is" is replaced with "because"

3.They play games on the computer so that they can avoid work or reality and satisfy daydream.

"avoid work or reality" is replaced with "escape from work and reality".
I don't know what "satisfy daydream" means. 是「滿足白日夢」嗎？
If it refers to the achievement in virtual reality, it can be replaced with "achieve the goal which is not possible in reality."


4.However, if they spend too much time playing, they will be distracted from their studies.
It's ok...


5.Most students like to play overnight and easily become ill because they do not have enough sleep.
It's ok...

6.They also spend a lot of money to buy new games.
"to buy new games" should be replaced with buying new games.
spend + sth. + gerund.

7.It wastes their money very much.
It should be rewritten as "It wastes their money a lot."

"Much" seldom appears in the situation that the sentence represents positive meaning.

8.If they instead this money to do other meaningful things, such as buying reference book and donating.

"If they instead this money to" should be rewritten as "Instead, they can use the money...."


9.Family relations can be affected because these teenagers do not have time communicate with their families and cause many arguments.

There is no 's' for "relation".
"Can" is better to be replaced as "may".
"May" represents the high posibility of the event "family relation is affected"
After "many arguments.", It is preferable to insert "with them".

2008-04-23 23:29:36 補充：
10.Computer games are not all bad, however. Some provide us with knowledge and other is helping us relaxing.

"are not all bad" should be replaced with "are not bad at all"
"other is helping" should be replaced with "some help us relax"

2008-04-23 23:29:41 補充：
11.The key is to do everything in moderation.
I'm not sure about if it is correct.
Personally, I think it is better to replace " in moderation" with moderately.


Please feel free to make contact with me if there are any errors.

1.Young people are easily addicted to computer games.

2.They like playing computer games and do not want to study because they think it is boring.

3.They play computer games so that they can avoid work or reality and keep on the daydreaming.

4.However, if they spend too much time playing, they will be distracted from their studies.

5.Most students like to play overnight and easily become ill because they do not have enough sleep.

6.They also spend a lot of money to buy new games.

7. They waste alot of money on the computer games.

8 9 .If they use the money to do other meaningful things, such as buying reference books and donating to charity organizations, family relations can be improved because these teenagers do not have time to communicate with their families and have caused many conflicts.

10. However, computer games are not always bad, sometimes they help us to learn and relax.

11. Moderation is the key to everything we do.