文法有沒有錯?thx

kinki072001hk2001

2008-04-03 8:00 am

唔該幫我睇睇下面兩篇野既文法有無錯~因為我好耐無用英文啦=3=
係要黎比大學睇架~thank you!!!!!!

1. I am very interested in Hotel management .
And it was because few years ago i strated study about tourism.
And i think that it was so many funny and hope inside, airline especially.
So i already get the airline diploma to fulfil my needs. But, it's still not enough for my needs, also just this educational background is not enough if i want to join in this family. I know now in the world still do not have any course is study about Airline management. So,i choose Hotel management because Airline management is as same as Hotel management.
Switzerland is the best country of study Hotel management in the world.
There have many of the best hotel management university.
And Gilon is one of them, so I choose Gilon to be my study place in the future.

2. After study the Bachelor Degree in Gilon, I will pursus work in Hong Kong, greater China.It was because this is the place where i born and where i grow up. So i want to try my best to work for my country.
first of all, i will entry level in 4 or 5 star airline company. Because after the bachelor degreeand i am just 23 years old, it is the best age to join in airline. Also, this is my dream.
And i woukd like to be an airline company manager after work for 5years.

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2008-04-03 10:40 am

✔ 最佳答案

1. I am very interested in Hotel management .
It is because few years ago i started studying tourism.
I think that it was so much fun and hope inside, especially airlines.
So i get a airline diploma to fulfil my dream. However, it is not enough for me to enter an airline company as i had such a low education level. I know now in the world still do not have any Airline management course. So,i choose Hotel management because Airline management is similar to hotel management.
Switzerland is the best country of studying Hotel management among the world.
There are many top hotel management universities.
Gilon is one of them, so I choose Gilon to be my study place in the future.

2. After studying the Bachelor Degree in Gilon, I would pursue working in Hong Kong and China.It is because this is the place where i born and grown up. So i want to try my best to work for my own country.
First of all, i will enter a level 4 or 5 star airline company. Because after the bachelor degree i am just 23 years old, that would be the best age to join in an airline company. Most importantly, this is my dream.
I woukd like to be an airline company manager after 5 year working.

not 100percent sure this is correct as i am dont know what you want to express in some sentences. major gramma mistake is checked.

all the best =]

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