吾該`可吾可以幫我改下篇英文作文呀??

My school * (blank) is xxx Secondary School. It is in Tai Wai . I *have been studying/ have studied in this school *for four years already.
This year is *the 30th Anniversary of *my school.
My school is very big and *there are many facilities. There is a big playground. When *it is at the recess or at the lunch time, there are many students *playing basketball and volleyball. We *have two teaching *buildings. The old one has five floors and the new one has six floors. There are *classrooms *and *laboratories, *a library , *a staff room , *a sick room ,*a tuck shop ……*Moreover, we *have a big garden on *the top of the building .
We have 26 *classrooms and 11*special *rooms in our school. *For examples: *Computer Room, *Music Room, *Art Room, *Geography Room , *Biology Laboratory, *Chemistry Laboratory , *Physic Laboratory….etc.
Our library is on *the third floor. It is very big. There are lots of *books and *computers for the students. We can borrow *books in the library. Moreover, we can stay in the library to study and *to do homework. *It is very *serene. After school, many students *go to the library *to study *and *to do their homework. *There is a big garden on *the top of the building. It is very beautiful. It *was built/ set up *by our students *very hard-working. There are different *plants, *fishes and some *chairs and *tables. It is for our students *to stay in the garden and *to talk to/ chat with their friends. I *sit on the chair of this beautiful garden *and I feel very comfortable.
*In addition, in our school, *there is a climbing wall. *It is very high. *It is about *18 metres *high. I think it is very *dangerous and *scary, so I will not climb it. But many students have climbed the wall already. I think they are very *brave.
I think my school is very good. I study in this school *and I feel very happy *because *all of the *teachers *are very kind. I think they can *teach me a lot. So I like my school, my *teachers and my classmates.

2008-03-30 18:46:13 補充：
1. I have been studying有我到現在一直都在這裏讀書和我在未來都會在這裏讀書的意思。
I have studied 只有我到現在一直都在這裏讀書的意思

2. I have studied … for 4 years. 我已學習了……4年。
I have studied … since 1999. 我從1999年便開始學習……。

3. equipments指儀器；facilities指設施

2008-03-30 18:46:34 補充：
4. There are a lot of people eating in the restaurant.: 對的
There are a lot of people to eat in the restaurant.: 不對的

5. We/They/ I後用have；he/she/it後用has

6. 如果物件不是眾數的話（即沒加s），必須加上數量詞：
An apple, the boy

7. Moreover是連接詞，解作再者，也可用also, furthermore, in addition

8. 那些特別室是名字來的，所以要大楷

2008-03-30 18:46:47 補充：
10. Many students go to…因為已是習慣了，要用present tense

11. I eat apple and orange. 肯定句的連接詞利用and
I don’t eat apple or orange. 否定句的連接詞利用or

12. fishes代表不同物種的魚，原則上是沒有眾數的

13. It is for… to…

14. talk to someone/ chat with someone

15. I sit in the garden是錯的因為你不會坐在花園裏的

16. bravery是名詞；brave是形容詞

My school name is xxx Secondary School. It is in Tai Wai . I studied in this school for four years already.
This year is the 30thAnniversary of xxx Secondary School.
My school is very big and full of useful stuffs. There is a big playground. When it is recess or lunch time, there are always a lot of schoolmates playing basketball and volleyball. We have two school building.The old one is a five-floor building and the new one is a six-floor building. There are many classroom, some laboratories, a library, a staff room, sick room, a snack shop......etc. On top of these, we have a big garden on top of the building.
We have twenty-six classrooms and eleven special rooms in our school just as computer room, music room, art room , geog room , biology lab., chemistry lab., physic lab......etc.
Our library is on the third floor. It is very big.There are a lot of books and computers for schoolmates. We can borrow books from the library. Moreover, we can study and do homeworks in the library.(There is very serenity)??(surely wrong but I do not know what the word mean..=.="). After school, schoolmates can go to the library to study or do homeworks. On top of that, the big garden on top of our building is very beautiful. It is made by our schoolmates. They really worked hard! There are different plants, an aqua-box, some chairs and tables in the garden then our schoolmates can stay in the garden and talk with their friends. When sit in this beautiful garden, I feel very comfortable.
Moreover, in our school, we have a climbing wall.It is very high, which is about 18 meter tall. I think it is very dangerous and scary, so I have never climb it. But many schoolmates have climbed the wall already. I think they are very brave.
I think my school is very good. As soon as I study in this school, I feel very happy because all the teachers are very kind. I think they can increase my knowledge. So I like my school, my teacher and my classmates.

My school name is xxx Secondary School. It is in Tai Wai . I have studied in this school for four years already.
This year is 30thAnniversary of xxx Secondary School.
My school is very big and the equipment is very complete. There is a big playground. When the recess or at the lunch time,there are many students to play basketball and volleyball. We have two teaching building.The old one has five floors and the new one has six floors. There are many classroom , lab ,a library , staff room , sick room ,tuck shop ……On top of that,we have a big garden on top of the building .
We have 26 classroom and 11specials room in our school. Example: computer room, music room, art room , geog room , bio lab, chem lab , phy lab….etc.
Our library is on third floor. It is very big.There are lots of book and computer for the students. We can borrow the book in the library .Moreover, we can stay in the library to study and do homework.There is very serenity. After school, many students will go to the library and study or do their homework .On top of that, we has a big garden on top of the building. It is very beautiful. It is making from our students, they are hard-working. There are different plants, fish and some chair and table. It is for our students can stay in the garden and talk with their friends. When I sit in this beautiful garden, I feel relaxed and comfortable.
Moreover, in our school, we have a climbing wall.It is very high, it is about 18m. I think it is very danger and scare, so I never climb it. But many students have climbed the wall already. I think they are very brave.
I think my school is very good. I study in this school, I feel very happy. Because all the teachers are kind and patient. I think they can increase my knowledge. So I like my school, my teachers and my classmates.